my attempted poem!!

As I leave the shelter i was in, a shadow encloses around me. I walk into the sunlight as dark clouds cover the sky, I look up in the sky as it starts to rain I tilt my head all the way back as the rain comes harder and faster. I look around me as flowers start to bloom, I smile at the site of this and the shadow frees me as the sun comes out.

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