Inside the Computer

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truth: I have always wanted to go into a computer world. 2

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Imagination: "Hello!" I yelled at Erin, "I know you have a big computer but usually big things die quickly."4

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Erin blinked quickly then smacked me in the face making a bright red mark where her hand hit. "You know I love you baby. I know you love me..." she folded her arms and gave a deep breath. "Can you please show me a little support from time to time?"6

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"Stop it!" every time she would give the puppy eyes I had to listen. "This computer might have been a waste of $500!" I did love her very much. Ever since the first day of tenth grade. She gave me the pouty face and shrugged her shoulders. "It looks cool?" I pretended.8

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"Thank you s--"10

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"Ssss." I backed up to look at her. She was frozen.  Not in ice but in time. Her hair was still and her lips were still saying so. "Erin!" I called thinking she was playing a prank on me.12

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The giant (ugly) computer started glowing and making a strange noise. "Honey?" I shouted. A swirling funnel of electric blue light came from the computer and surrounded me.14

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I couldn't move, I couldn't breath, it was like I was in a coma. It was the most terrifying moment in my life.16

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Everything went dark for a moment. When the light came back I saw tall buildings covered in ram and motherboards. "Hello?" I yelled hoping there would be people there to help. I was right.18

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"Goodmorning sir, this is a world unfirmilliar to your kind." a man walked up to me,  "This world is for ASDCCX2345 or User #65, name: Erin. She has recently created this world. Are you Erin?"20

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I tried to hold in the laugh, "You called me sir and asked if I'm a guy... aren't you sup[posed to be a computer?" the sensation that I belonged strated to settle in.22

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"I am sorry. I have made an error." the man gave me a disk and pointed me in the direction of a tiny building. That is now where I reside as I write this tale. I need you to know Erin. I love you.24

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Please Erin... or anyone who reads this you must trust me when I say... this is my home.26

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SEND|32

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A contest entry

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  • Sammiannnz
    July 17

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    Interesting story. One spelling mistake near the end; there is an ] in the middle of supposed. Well done and good luck for the contest.

    Sammi

  • PeepingTom
    July 10
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    no

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.