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"Hey."2

The man leaning against the wall started, then stood up straighter with his hands in his pockets.3

"So, somebody told me you were looking for this girl." The woman walked fully into the light.4

The man smirked. The woman was slender, tall, goodlooking - I could make a hell of a profit with her, he thought.5

"Heh, I was. But now I'm like, forget that girl. What's your name?"6

"Lady Luck. Don't you know?"7

"Sorry." The man smiled again and shrugged. "My luck's just never been as good as you."8

"Mm. It's not getting any better tonight... Valentino."9

Before he could react, the woman had already kicked him three times in succession, and landed a neat punch to his nose. The man groaned.10

"Getting bloody already?" The woman said in disgust.11

"You punched my damn nose!" The man said through his bloody hand clutching his face.12

"Be glad you're not dead, otherwise I couldn't get my money."13

The man gave a snort. "You're a bounty hunter, huh?"14

"Hmm, nope," she said cheerfully. "I'm just all for bling."15

She suddenly pulled the man up and grabbed his neck. "Now listen. I heard you completed a deal tonight. Lots of dangerous stuff, lots of cash. I want the money." With the last word, her grip tightened.16

"Blargh.. all right, it's in my pocket..."17

"Which pocket?" she demanded.18

"Left.. one..." he rasped.19

The woman stuck her hand into the pocket he indicated, and drew out a collapsible knife.20

"Son of a -" she hissed. "Trying to make me cut my hand? you know what, I will turn you in after all."21

"No.. please..." he reached for her.22

"Shut up," she said, and knocked aside his hand.23

She dragged him to his car, the only one left among the lots, and opened the door. She was about to tell him how she would drive his car to the police headquarters (she had no ride) when she saw a metal suitcase resting in the passenger seat.24

"What the.." She reached in, pulled the case out and opened it on the ground. Inside were stacks of bills and the woman could only guess how much there was.25

"I changed my mind, I will let you go," she said as she closed the case and turned around.26

Wham! Pain seared through the cheek where Valentino had hit her. His nose had stopped bleeding and he was back on his feet, itching for a fight.27

"You slummy -" She too stood up and swung the case at him as hard as she could.28

"Argh!" The man fell, gripping his privates.29

"That's for crossing me in the first place. And this," she rolled him over and kicked him again, earning another yell, "this should teach you not to mess around with us females. Adios, Valentino. May your luck be better one day." She picked up the suitcase, threw it into the car, and drove off.30

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The woman the woman the woman. Yes she has a name.
This is just the first part. Tell me how it is.
Cmnt for cmnt?

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  • xMomo
    July 10

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    Well I like it kind of it's a little different to me so i'm still sort of thinking it over keep going i'd tell you what I think u could improve but it's hard typing on my iPod

  • rustic
    July 9
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    i liked it , it kept me reading :)

    clicked on random and I get an ass kicking women story