She was a shadow, fluttering in the breeze. She wasn't there, yet somehow she was. 1
The day I met her was amazing. She did random acts of kindness to everyone she met. She did none to me. Maybe it was because she had been in my class me whole life and I was just now seeing her. Whatever the reason..I was as invisible to her as she was to the rest of the world. 2
Her name was Angela...yet those who talked to her called her Angel. I believe she may have been one. She had a radiant glow to her, one you couldn't ignore. She was funny, smart,kind, and beautiful to some. She was amazing. She was untouchable.3
Unreachable. I tried to understand her. But she slipped through my fingers. This girl was totally amazing. She had nothing to gain.....nothing to lose. She lived her life as if she knew she would die the next day. 4
I wanted to hold her in my arms. To make her smile. She had a beautiful smile. She never smiled though, too many people picked on her. she had a close circle of friends, and she always showed up at the right parties, yet she wasn't popular.5
One day she was gone....and we found ourselves missing her. Those of us who didn't even know her missed her. Who knew such a girl could have such an impact on my whole school?6
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hey, i know how you feel. people are so sure that everyone else has to be exactly like them that most everyone forms to be that way. and then someonee new comes along and its like, " whoa...big shock. " but they still ignore them and when they finally leave and are finally back to their conformist world they miss the change.
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There was a person like that in my school, when she was gone everyone like missed her, and i was like, Oh bull, come on some of you picked on her and some of you ignored her completely, dont come up with this crap just when she leaves....everyone looked at me like i commited a crime, i hate people
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don't leave me hanging like that!! i must know what happened to her... oo i am sooo curious now!! i cnt wait to read more. if i left 7 more reviews that were one word each would that entice you to keep writing?
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Sweet
very nice story!
and yes, you should right more.
this reminds me of one of my friends.. sweet, unoticable, yet so kind.
keep writing, you had my attention at the first line..
~Very well written~
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interesting
this is great. i liked it. i think you should definetly write more. i want to know what happened to her. write on!!
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OMG! charlie actually liked a story of mine?!?!? i'm scared! lol....what this story is is really something you would read on the back of a book-cover. I will write more when i get 7 critiques...
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That was great. A good character study. Good Job -
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Yeah! You must write more! I think this could turn out to be an interesting story! The descprition and emotions are great. i can see what you are trying to do and i think more should definately be written! -
Yum
Good.
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