Hell Hath No Fury

Hell Hath No Fury1

Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned
Remember this, for you’ve been warned
A woman’s heart, we know, is endless
Full of love, laughter, joy, and sadness2

It's a wise man, who holds her trust
And doesn't bend to shameless lust
For when you break a woman’s heart,
You cause her life to fall apart3


Then you shall come to rue the day
For a scorned wife will make you pay
Kids and money, you will fight
It will be your endless plight4

Before you make a big mistake
Heed these words, for pity’s sake
Go home tonight and kiss your wife
And count the blessings in your life5

Author notes

My second lame attempt at poetry. This was inspired by all the sleazy politicians out there, cheating on their poor wives. LOL.

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  • tsavo gold member
    July 29

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    Fantastic. Really well put! Wow! i'm surprised more people haven't commented on this. It's short and to the point. Really great job.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Glitflyer
    July 9

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    Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned
    Remember this, for you’ve been warned
    A woman’s heart, we know, is endless
    Full of love, laughter, joy, and sadness2

    Cool.. Its not lame. Its nice!


  • Abstract Muse gold member
    July 7

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    I pity the fool who scorns his wife!
    Ok, that's my lame-ass attempt at a Mr.T impression.

    Interesting how you went from simple romance directly into political two timing. *laughs*

    This has much stronger feeling than the other. Though the first line is a bit cliche, it fits for the theme of the poem. I like the mix of old time phrasings in a more modern theme. It has a much better overall flow to it than the last one.

    There are a couple of spots that could use refining, but I'll let Val help you with that. After all, this is definitely a woman's poem. *nods sagely*

    It sounds very good as it is though.
    You're a poet in the making.
    Greg


  • Valkyrie silver member
    July 7

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    Yeah, what's up with that? It's like it's written in the "Secret Politician Book of FAIL" or something. It must take a lot of patience for those wives to stand there beside their husbands when they publicly confess their misdeeds. I'm waiting for the time one hires a sniper for that press conference.

    This poem has a much stronger tone to it. The one line that didn't quite seem to fit was the "shot her with a dart" line. Maybe something that ends with "apart"?

    Suggestions from the other poem can be applied here. I'm glad you've branched out into poetry; can I interest you in trying a different rhyme scheme or pattern too? Those are always fun!

    • Hatshepsut gold member
      July 7
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      LOL...yea the most recent one, Governor Sanford, who claims that his mistress is his 'soul mate' but he's willing to 'try' to fall in love with his wife again. What an azz....lol

      Yes, please, any advice will be great. I would like to try out a different rhyme scheme and pattern...mine is rather simplistic.

      Thanks, Val!

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