Marilyn stood and openly wept. All those years she had wasted. Never had science played her so wrong as today. Fifteen years ago she had taken a gamble and had Ernie cryogenically frozen. They were so close to reanimation and she knew that he would come back just for her. 1
He had left her everything, little did she know it was not out of love for her but to spite his wife. 2
Fifteen years they had battled over an estate that had not been that substantial in the first place. Yes there was property and there were savings, but Ernie had debts as well and mortgages. He had freed his wife from those burdens by handing it all to the mistress who had cost him so much. 3
She was free of that, but would Ernie still want her. She had been lifted and nipped and tucked in an effort to hold back the years, not knowing how long it would be before they could free him from his inanimate state. They may have to start from scratch but she had never stopped loving him. 4
She watched as that manipulative snake, his wife, walked up and got him to sign the papers. Did he know what he was signing? Would they hold up in court now that he was alive again? She waited until he was alone with the doctors and then slipped through the door. He looked over and saw her. He smiled and reached for her. She ran into his arms, and shuddered. He felt so cold, his flesh so plastic. Stepping back she looked into his eyes and saw the color start to fade. The skin under his fingernails was already blue as were his lips. She was losing him a second time, how could this be. 5
She screamed and grabbed the doctor. He just shook his head and layed Ernie back on his table. 6
It seems they are only able to do partial rebirths and those few minutes were all Ernie had left in him. 7
Left with truly nothing Marilyn headed to the front of the facility. On the way out the door they asked if she wanted them to refreeze Ernie so they could try again in a few years. She looked at them horrified and ran. 8
Author notes
OK so this is in essence a different look at Adrienne's story So Long.
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To get an idea where this all came from I recommend you read it.
Susan
What did you think? Please comment!
Comments
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frozen nightmare
That was such a satire , a whimsy of a tale of freezing ones
wishes of love , and then to have it all wasted in one
useless moment ..quite a nightmare dream , would better be . -
Okay the hair on my head is all standing now.. Off to read, Catressa
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excellent~
Haven't dropped by to read you poems or writes in awhile
Have had surgery and my cancer is back...this is a very thought provoking write...I have heard about cryogenics..don't think I would want to be frozen....too cold
but this is indeed a thought provoker and oh congrats on being a Moderator
When you get time drop by and see me too
Hugs n love
Susan~~~
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I want to be frozen...and I want to come back as a cow...no wait...I want to become A Hindu and worship cows. I want to be frozen and comeback as a popsicle...
I beat both of you in writing a cryogenic story. I wrote one a few months ago.
It is an interesting topic filled with moral and ethical ramifications. You know, I bet she went back in moments later and said, "Yes" to re-freezing him. I have a feeling from reading this story, that she doesn't quit that easy. I like that you chose to write the other woman's side...hey, I want to write poor Ernie's side...except ernie will be a Billy Goat and the two women will be a snake and a mongoose...
You also seemed to remove this from a Sci Fi element, making it more modern...both work, but require a different approach by the reader. Adrienne's tone was also more ironic, while yours is more tragic...wonder what mine would be?
Man, those cryogenics people have a sweet deal. I wish I worked at one of those places! Nothing but frozen stiffs to look after! -
I was anxiously hanging on waiting for the zinger, "There, before staring eyes and gaping mouths, they saw the plug had been pulled from the wall. Hehehe The real ending was far more dramatic and thought provoking, kind of reminds me, "It is appointed unto men once to die."
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A most cynical look at cyrogenics...but all too plausible from where we stand now. Everyone wants to live forever...if even for a few gasping breaths more.
You've added a dimension to Adrienne's story that didn't exist before...in a very well written piece.
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A great story full of emotions and real stuff. Great work
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excellent
A brilliant story. Hadn't known you were into Science Fiction. This as a real treat to read.
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I am so amazed at this Susan. Most of it I was thinking, possibly even hinting at but probably not, in my story. I have been fascinated with cyrogenics in the past; not to do it, but the ethical ramifications of it. And the scientific ones too. BUT this is about Marilyn. Quite as I saw her you have portrayed her motivations well, although a bit nicer than me. Ha ha. Well someone had to bankroll her surgeries too huh. But in the end, you made her love the rat. Knowing how many different levels of love there really are, it seems pretty fitting. I am impressed as always with your writing
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