Mint Toothpaste

"That's it. Give me the toothpaste." Ryan demanded, glaring down at his six year old brother, arms crossed, glaring with his famous evil eye.1

"No." George said, and snickered. Then clutched it to his chest. "It's mine." 2

"No. It's not! I need to brush my teeth, now just give me the dang toothpaste for a moment!" Ryan raised his voice, and towered over George, reaching out his arm and grabbing the back of his footy pajamas, pulling him back. George whined and struggled, but Ryan had a firm grip on him. With one hand, he kept his hand on the pajamas, and the other he snatched the toothbrush swiftly out of George's hand.3

"Thank you very much!" Ryan said in triumph, popping open the lid and placing it on the counter, squirting some of the paste onto his brush.4

"NO!" George screamed out suddenly and charged into Ryan's legs, knocking him into the side of the wall lightly, his face as red as a plum, as if he was about to choke. Ryan tilted his head backwards and sighed heavily, then looked down at his younger brother,5

"Hey! Get off!" Ryan yelled, muffled, his tooth brush sticking out of his mouth, spit trickling down the side of his chin. "It's just tooth paste! God!"6

"It's mine! Mine! Mine! Mine!" George insisted, wailing frantically, pounding his small fists against Ryan's muscled legs.7

"Dude...fine!" Ryan backed down, toothbrush in mouth, handing the tube back to George, holding his hands up by his ears, staring at his brother with confusion. What was his deal? 8

It's only toothpaste...9

"Stop the shouting up there! What's going on?!" their mother yelled up to them from the bottom of their oak staircase. George gave Ryan one last pestering glare, then opened the bathroom door, stomped out, toothpaste in hand.10

Ryan then took out his verdant colored toothbrush and stared at it oddly, "This is really minty. And sugary. Must be new" he muttered to himself, then stuck it back in his mouth and finished his brushing of teeth.11

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When George entered his room, he reached up and flicked the lights on, taking a running start, he pounced upon his bed, holding up his prized possession, the toothpaste.13

Or so Ryan had thought...but George knew better.14

George twisted the cap, inserted it into his mouth and squeezed, then out came a mushy glob of mint ice cream, which was supposedly toothpaste. There is no question on how exactly he had gotten that into the tube, or why it was in a Colgate tube, all that matter was that George had his favorite mint ice cream, and had also brushed his teeth with it. It was all his.15

"Mine, all mine." George smiled to himself happily.16

Author notes

So, this was for a contest! lol. I tried my best and I liked this line a lot..it was one of my favorites. xD Hope you enjoy!

-Rose

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  • Cerise Dragon
    July 24

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    aw cute haha. i think that in the third paragraph, last sentence you said:
    and the other he snatched the toothbrush swiftly out of George's hand
    i think instead of toothbrush you meant toothpaste
    hehe just a note


    • EverRose
      July 24
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      O, I shall go fix that soon...lol.
      Thanks for commenting and reading!


  • Elvenfairy
    July 23

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    now this was a fun story with an amusing ending! You really made me laugh with this. You totally deserved a trophie. I can just see the little kid fighting for his ice cream with his oblivious older, muscular brother. It sounds like the kind of thing I would do if I had older brothers to do it to.


  • yin20yang
    July 21

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    ummmmm. okay odd... but I want the toothpaste now too!! Can't stop laughing!!! Good job!!! Quite an original piece you have got here!!


  • Everpurple
    July 19
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    That is so cute! Welcome to the finalists!


  • artaq gold member
    July 17

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    HEHEHE! what a brilliantly funny story. Very well written. Great Job!

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


    • EverRose
      July 17
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      Hi!
      Thanks for reading! Yay you found it funny! That's good! Heeh!
      Bye!


  • pixie queen
    July 7
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    hehehe i like it...I WANT THE MINT ICECREAM TOOTHPASTE!

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