Once upon a time in a land where the air was blue and the grass was green, 1
there lived a dog that had never been seen. 2
He came out at night when the sky was white 3
and chased the rabbits at full flight. 4
People called him Lightening ‘cause he was so fast 5
and all you could see was the smoke coming out from his ears. 6
Over rolling hills that never stood still 7
he would hunt the bunnies with a resolute will. 8
Often could be heard squeals of delight, 9
when he would corner a bunny and it would put up a fight. 10
Folklore has it that those that heard those sounds 11
were never the same, and I will be bound, 12
if you have a close look, they are no longer around. 13
The bunny and the dog would romp for hours, 14
kicking over daisies and other wild wood flowers 15
until their energy was all but spent 16
and it was time for a cooling shower with heather scent.17
Under the purple waterfall where the pink moss grows, 18
they would frolic and splash amid the soap like snow. 19
Then into the toi-toi grass they would tumble, 20
rubbing each the other dry, 21
with mother moon laughing fit to cry. 22
As the blue light of morning herald the day, 23
they would clean off their paws and scurry away 24
over the rolling hills that never stood still, 25
the rabbit to his burrow, the dog to the mill. 26
And so is the tale of the dog, “that had never been seen”, 27
if he had been, who knows, he very well might have been green!28
Sammy 200529
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HUGE
Lisa!
How wonderful to see you!
Gee it was good to have you visit. Glad you liked the poem.
I bet Strider is just like Lightening and gets up to all sorts of mischief ..
Take care now dear Granddaughter,
Gramps ...
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Well Gramps!
I love it. You have such a range when it comes to writing I think you could write anything.
Thanks for letting us read this wonderful piece, I have the best picture of this dog chasing after the poor bunny!!!
Love and Sparkles,
Lisa
And this is just so very cute! Something would read to my little cousin! I wish I had a dog named Lightning! My little dog Strider, he's just expensive! -
It's nice to be inspired
So thanks to you too
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Thanks Di ... I really appreciate your kind words ...
Take care,
Sammy
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Thank you -G for your kind words ... It's a thrill to know that what you write has inspired another writer ...
Take care,
Sammy
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Hi, loved it, wonderful, we need more of these kind of write, it made me laugh and feel like a kid again, well done my friend it was an enchanting read, all the best, hugs Di
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I am here to officially leave a comment as I have had the pleasure of exchanging words with you already
I must admit that this was one of the first submissions to this contest I read and which gave me inspiration to even attempt myself
Funny how we touch people or effect them in ways without ever realizing...and now you know
If you missed the gist to this long winded comment... I rather enjoyed this and found it quite entertaining
Best wishes always
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Yes ... when the sky was white ...this is written to entertain children ... there are a lot of crazy lines in here ...
Thanks for coming by.
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At night, when the sky was white?
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Thank you Cyan ... I really do appreciate you coming by to comment.
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Very nice blend of poetry and prose here, allthough a short story in structure it has a bouncy rhythm that you have given it. The bouncy rhythm definately suits the story and gives it a fairy tale like feel.
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Thanks Red ... I really appreciate you reading and commenting.
Take care,
Sammy -
I've never tried writing for children.. lovely write
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Thanks Paul. I appreciate your visit and comment.
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A rhyming story thats very clever with a cat in the hat flavour
all the best...
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Thank you Maria ... I appreciate your comment.
Sammy -
I love the rhyming and the story was really nice!!!!
I hope you keep this writing up because it is really well written. Good luck in the contest
Maria
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I can't believe I missed that. I was so engrossed in the story that it just went right over my head. What can I say? I'm dumb, stuck on stupid!
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... I couldn't very well put hind legs now, could I ?
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I think I will go bury my head now. I feel so dumb!!
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My oh my dear Kimberly ... you are slipping ...
What rhymes with past?
Roll your "R's"
Sammy
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I am sooo happy to see you back here and entering one of your lovely creations in one of my contests Sammy! Welcome back, welcome home, don't go away!! Reading you always gives me the greatest of pleasure. This is a delightful tale and has that sign song quality that kids love so much. I did notice one thing which has me on the edge of my seat. Third sentence: "People called him Lightening ‘cause he was so fast and all you could see was the smoke from his" ___. His what???
I am on oins and needles here now awaiting your reply. Thank you for entering my contest Sammy and good luck!
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No problem.
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Thank you Ameythst.
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Thank you MM for your delicious comment.
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Ooh, a story about a dog named Lightening and a bunny.. Yeah.. Thats real nice.. Just imagine, running.. Running.. Running.. Lol, Well good job! I enjoyed this very much! ^_^
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Oh Sammy!!! So good to see you back again! This is absolutely priceless! How sweet. So much great imagery in this story/tale. Toi-toi grass?? How precious! What an imagination you have, my friend. This is so very witty, and delightfull! It brought a HUGE smile to my face that just kept getting bigger and bigger as I read through this I have so missed you, my friend! A simply wonderful tale. Much love and laughter to you and yours.
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