Damn Angry

'The Fucking Mother Sucker,' Carl hissed dragging his hand into his now disheveled hair.1

'I hate her! I hate her and she call herself a mother! No wonder I have no strong feelings about family cause they treat me like some damn robot!2

He paced the room trying to find a way to calm himself as if his mother would gain satisfaction seeing him like this.3

'No free opinion and sarcastic comments or else it is viewed as being fucking rude or an bloody insult.'4

He laughed humorlessly, 'How I live under her roof for 18 years is beyond me.'

Author notes

I hope you like it. Although I myself is not a fan of expletives...I wrote this down when i was extremely angry at someone. I hope its not too much.

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  • QueenDethklok
    December 27, 2009

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    What the Hell?

    I am missing some information, and what was this fight about? The way I see it there is so many missing puzzles with the plot. What go carol so pissed at the mom?

    beginning: 3, language: 5, plot: 1, ending: 3, dialog: 2, characters: 2.


  • Intoxica
    December 21, 2009

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    Errr...Was it your own mother you were angry at?
    I can fully relate to anger towards mothers. I bitch about it in my journal, then I feel bad coz she lets me live under a roof with food and clothes and warmth. And pays my school fees.

    But I don't see how this was a rant.
    Sure, you can have a third person rant. You entered this in my contest because it's angry, huh?


  • Lady Pixie Greeters member
    November 21, 2009

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    Definitely a portrayal of angry emotion here.
    I would suggest an 'adult' label for the language though.
    Otherwise, good display. Left me curious.

    Thanks for entering the contest

    Pixie


  • J.R.Coleman
    July 16, 2009
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    It is a LITTLE too much.
    Thanks for entering, though.


  • Reaver gold member
    July 9, 2009
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    Very Angry!

    This read much like a rant.

    I felt anger throughout and some frustration as well.
    I enjoyed reading though it did leave me wondering more about Carl. who was he? where did he go from this dark feeling?

    for entering my contest!
    good


    Rian,


  • Just Listen.
    July 6, 2009
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    Wow, great work Niky!

    I'm proud of you, you're getting better.

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