When United Flight 372 spiraled helplessly to the ground and incinerated, Jeannie alone, walked away. 1
The tragedy awakened in her a hypothesis: that she could not cease to breathe until her proverbial number was up. Confidence propelled her onto the train tracks to prove her theory. 2
Ironically, she remained convinced of her own immortality, forever. 3
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Masterfully Composed!
What a way to find out you're not invincible. She must have felt pretty cat like even if for a brief moment. You've handled this topic expertly. I've just decided to delve into it myself. Great writing, extremely masterful and best wishes in the contest.
Avril
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Ugh.. this is sad! This is certainly most original... and yes, it makes me think. What if there was an unconsidered variable in her hypothesis? What if your "number" can't be pulled up earlier than its time by other things, but it can by you? What if it wasn't time, and she unnecessarily took advantage of her ability to check out early? It's serious question since we are talking forever...
Very well done. Extremely sad, but well done. Congrats on the HM.
--Jocelyn
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This is a really neat piece... I saw this same contest and thought about entering, but I didn't think it would be possible to come up with anything good in only 55 words, but you've done an excellent job! Good luck in this contest!
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My 'TooRainbow' how interestingly clever to build a story on such a rigid platform. The topic is there too. The number of people who go through life bouncing off tragedy.
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I actually saw a movie like this...wish I could remember the name. Yeah, it must be a shattering experience to survive...and a sense of self-destruction would seem to be a likely scenario. Unfortunately for her...her number did indeed come up. A intersting, hypothesis you've given us.
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yep 55 words
Ok now that is new and different. And that is a good thing. I had no idea where that was going in the first line. I thought oh goodness a dark one. You have added not one but two twists which is great for such a small space.
I have to tell you that this was worth reading.
Thank you and good luck
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yep 55 words
Ok now that is new and different. And that is a good thing. I had no idea where that was going in the first line. I thought oh goodness a dark one. You have added not one but two twists which is great for such a small space.
I have to tell you that this was worth reading/
Thank you and good luck
Susan
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