My dad wrote haiku
Hundreds about everything
Magical he dreamt 1
2
The clouds are waning
Stars dot the blackness of space
Reach up and touch them3
Sailing up and down
Out over the vast blue sea
only Rex and me4
The running dog jumps
Then flops down exhaustedly
Rex happily pants5
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Dragons fly high above
Swoop down, fire dousing the ground
Laughs shake their bellies7
Over, under, through
Loopdy-loop and flippdy-flop
Ouch he hit the ground
Author notes
My dad used to write haiku all the time and I can't find the book he gave me full of them. 
I hope these are worthy of him and thank him for giving me and imagination.
written for contest; Knock Knock? Whose there? Haiku! by Asfand
They're not very deep or skillful, but I had fun writing them anyway 
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A contest entry
- Knock Knock? Whose there? Haiku! by Asfand.
125 points, ended July 10, 20 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Leave a nice comment, Leave grammar corrections too, Just enjoy yourself.
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Lovely. I love the last two.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Thanks
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I am dismissing the first haiku. Is it intentional? It's out of flow either way.
No 1. This was beautiful and delicately worded!
No 2. Another nice one. A good moment.
No 3. Nicely to continue the last. Good.
No 4. Fantasy. Nice!
No 5. Absolutely fantastic!
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Thanks for the bronze Asfand! The first one is the whole reason I wrote any haiku, my dad wrote so many and each of mine were inspired by his writings. Though he usually wrote about the seasons so I put my own little spin on them
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Haha! This was cute! Loved it!
Good luck! And thank you for your entry!
Great job!
- Asfand
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War of the words
Hmm... The first thing that struck me as I read these haikus was that you tried some haiku-ing for the fun of writing it, rather than to express something... As you said, they or not deep, but contrary to what you said, and in accordance with what lav said, they are really skillful. I liked the last one very much.. Somehow my funny bone was tickled
Keep Writing!!!
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Thanks Kirin! The last was what I intended so I'm happy
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wonderful Haikus
who says these are not skillful, they are excellent ...wonderful job Toni...good luck
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thank you for saying so. I'm happy you find them well done. good luck to you too
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