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WARNING!!! This story contains extremely graphic violence, gore, and disturbing content that may be difficult to read for most people.  Please don't complain to me if it was "too disgusting"--that's how I write and it's the type of material I enjoy. Cannibalism isn't right. It's a horrible, barbaric practice that I clearly don't support. My protagonist happens to be one, so don't think that I'm a fan of this. Also, this was my first shot at it! Be nice, and enjoy my crispy delight. 1

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She captured men like flies in honey jars, mesmerizing them with her firm, curvy little body and innocent features, her caramel skin and liquid green eyes that turned emerald in the light. Mermaid eyes—that’s what they were, and Katie Wilkes used this to her advantage. 3

The hunger was a bloodthirsty, demonic beast that couldn’t be controlled. It tortured her, enslaved her, plagued her mind every waking moment. 4

She loved to cook, but what she loved even more was preparing her meals; sprinkling them with seasoning and spices and chopped up vegetables fresh from her garden. Katie was a perfectionist. Everything had to be clean, scrubbed, and polished like her manicured nails. 5

If there were blood stains she mopped them up. If there happened to be bits of flesh, brain matter, or skull on the carpet; she took care of it. Just like in chemistry class, Katie knew that mixing the wrong chemicals together caused an explosion--a dangerous mess--so she had to use her brain to calculate each move. It was so easy to get caught, but Katie refused to live the rest of her life in a gross, unflattering orange jumpsuit with her hair uncombed, sitting behind bars with no cook books, meat, or make-up.6

Now, smacking on some Bonne Bell lip gloss, Katie pushed the pink, oversized sunglasses over her head, pretending to look through a rack of skinny jeans. 7

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Cherry Girl was a popular store, very chic and expensive. Plenty of young, cute men stumbled inside with their girlfriends or—if Katie got lucky—all alone. 9

Holding a pair of dark, ripped jeans with electric-blue dragons stitched onto the sides, Katie was about to rummage through the T-shirt rack when, to her delight, something prettier caught her eye. 10

He walked into the store with a languid, sexy swagger that oozed confidence and masculinity. Katie’s eyes immediately drank in the man’s physique: big, well-padded and powerful—she had to be careful with this one. He had lots of smooth, delicious skin that she could imagine herself licking and savouring like an ice cream cone. She liked how he was chubby—but not fat—and she loved his slight tummy, the mouth-wateringly broad shoulders accentuated by a tight black shirt. 11

Oh yeah, this one will look lovely in my oven, Katie giggled in her mind. Just the thought of skinning this cutie got her wet. 12

She placed the jeans aside and moved towards the man, who was looking at belts, his handsome, stubbly face relaxed. 13

Her victims were handsome, always handsome...14

“Hi”, Katie said. “Would you like me to start a change room?”15

He stared at her, baffled. “Do you even work here?”16

“Yes. My name is Katie, Katie Wilkes.” 17

“I’m Danny Smith”, he smiled, dimples winking in his broad cheeks. “Sure, you can start with these belts.” He handed her the seven items with a huge, bratty grin. “I must have a belt fetish.”18

“I’m into handcuffs, gags, and whips myself”, Katie replied coolly. “Last time someone belted my ass I couldn’t sit for a week! It was bright purple, like a plum, and the skin was so tender. Next time I experiment with that shit is too soon.”19

“I’m sure you’re a little wildcat in bed”, Danny said in a dark, throaty voice that made Katie’s nipples tighten with desire. 20

He wore silver-rimmed glasses and his chocolate brown, gold-flecked eyes looked her up and down, lingering on the curve of her ample breasts. Katie feasted her own gaze on Danny’s sleek, muscular forearms, admiring how creamy and flawless his skin was, the thickness of his toffee brown hair scrunched up with gel and that full, wet, kissable mouth she wanted to rip open and devour.21

“Fuck the belts”, he said. “That’s not why you approached me, is it?”22

Without another word Katie slid her arms around his big, luscious shoulders, captivated by his masculine scent of worn leather, aftershave, and burnt leaves. She brushed the pad of her thumb across his pouty lower lip. 23

“No...” She whispered, caressing the soft flesh. “I want to fuck you.”24

Danny wrapped his arms around her waist, pulling her close. 25

So deliciously built! Katie inwardly exclaimed, overjoyed by her lucky catch.26

Her hands trailed from his shoulders to his chest and belly, squeezing the flesh there, wondering if she’d bake him in the oven or the crock pot, what spices to use...27

Danny claimed her mouth in a fierce, passionate kiss, interrupting her disturbed fantasies. She moaned, parting her lips so his tongue could slither inside, the warm, velvety flesh probing like an eel. He tasted so good; like vodka and double mint gum—a warm, honey-drenched flavour. They were making out for nearly five minutes until an old man glared over in disgust.28

“Hey, get a room you two!” He barked.29

Katie withdrew, gasping for breath, and Danny pulled her out of the store like a child. 30

“He’s right. Let’s go to my place.”31

“No, my apartment”, Katie insisted, giving him her most beautiful smile. He was the curious little moth trapped in her lantern; wings flapping helplessly against the dangerous, honey-gold bulb. “I’ll make us a nice supper.”32

“Alright”, Danny agreed. 33

She licked her lips, already tasting his blood, his roasted skin and charred bones.34

He was going to be her finest meal yet.35

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They stumbled into the small, dainty apartment, swept up in a whirlwind of passion. Katie kicked off her high heels and fastened her legs around Danny’s waist, kissing him hard, blonde hair loose around her shoulders. 37

He carried her past the kitchen, past the oven that was already heating up, all the little spices, herbs, and delicacies sprinkled like fairy dust across the countertops. He tossed her onto the narrow bed, smiling as she giggled, her tiny body bouncing up and down. 38

“Come here, big boy!” Katie squealed. Her mermaid eyes—wide and innocent—shone like wet diamonds.39

Danny took off his glasses and crawled onto the bed, his body so heavy it was like a mountain of bricks compared to her petite 5’’4 frame. She relished his delicious weight, the way he was crushing her into the springy mattress, all that beautiful skin and hair and blood just begging to be savoured. 40

Their tongues battled hungrily as they devoured each other like rabid wolves, moaning, burning with need. He nibbled, sucked, and ravaged Katie with his masterful tongue, lapping up every inch of her like a cat laps up a saucer of milk. His cock, huge, hardened against her belly as she worshipped his face. 41

Katie shuddered when his elegant hands slid down her narrow back and caressed the full, delectable curves of her hips. She pierced the silken pad of his lip with her teeth, slicing it open like half-melted butter. Warm, sticky blood rushed into her mouth; paralysing her with pleasure as Danny cried out in pain. 42

“Oh god...” Katie moaned like a whore and licked up the crimson richness, wondering if his cum tasted this good; this salty. He groaned in sexual agony as she plundered his mouth again, nails biting into his shoulder blades, her denim-clad pussy grinding against the thick, swollen ridge of his cock. He unbuttoned her jeans while she popped open his zipper, excited by how big he was, how hard and ready. 43

Impatient, like a mother undressing her child for a bath, Katie yanked down his pants along with his underwear. 44

An appetizer, Katie hissed, thinking of all the creative things she could do with a severed dick. 45

The smell of fresh garlic bread tantalized her nostrils as she swirled her tongue around the head of Danny’s penis, licking off the delicious (and very salty) pre-cum. Slowly, torturously, she swallowed his entire length, pumping her lips up and down from bulbous tip to base like a Popsicle, making divine use of her jaw muscles. 46

Danny threw his head back, looking incredibly sexy with his lustrous, sweat-slick hair and plump lips that were bruised and bloody from the rough little kisses. He rhythmically thrust his hips in and out; jamming his cock so deep she was forced to open her mouth, releasing him with a wet “pop.” 47

“Fuck”, Katie breathed. Switching tactics, she wrapped her hand around his thick base and started to jerk him off, her palm lubricated from his pre-cum mixed with her own sweat so it made lurid squishy sounds with each hard, furious pump. Danny’s body shuddered and a low, almost wolf-like growl rumbled from deep in his throat, giving her goosebumps. 48

Just in the nick of time she closed her mouth on his engorged head, sucked hard, and with one last violent tug Danny exploded. Thick, creamy cum jetted into her mouth, splattering all over her breasts and face when she let go. It was just as salty as Katie imagined. She cleaned him off, swallowing every last drop. 49

The garlic bread smell was changing, liquefying, the new scent richer, so powerful that it gobbled up her senses, made her dizzy. 50

It was meat. 51

Katie could feel the beast stirring inside her, its dark head lifting, black gums peeled back to reveal long, jagged, needle-thin teeth. 52

The hunger simmered in Katie’s blood as she opened herself up like a flower. 53

She gasped as flesh pounded against flesh, slapping deliciously in perfect sync with the flimsy headboard and the smell of burning meat, sex, and murder that shimmered like gossamer insect wings in the kitchen, in her head.54

Die.55

Her hair a seaweed tangle on the pillow, long, shapely golden legs entwined with Danny’s, chest rising and falling as her heart thundered.56

The beast leaned back on its blood-stained haunches...waiting. 57

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“There’s a lovely supper in the oven”, Katie whispered, her voice a soft, angelic caress as she stroked his velvety hair, his impossibly vibrant skin (even more so from the sex) that she couldn’t wait to slit open and peel like wax paper. 59

Lots of delightful spices and herbs plucked right from the garden were tossed in the new crock pot Katie’s best friend had gotten her for her birthday (that is, before she ended up inside it: a tangle of bronzed limbs and meat so tender it dripped like candle wax from the bone). 60

It was time. 61

The sexy black leather apron, pockets stuffed full of bobby pins and razor blades, was slipped over Katie’s chest, cool and refreshing against her naked breasts. She put on latex gloves, snapping them against her wrists like a surgeon. 62

After fixing her hair and applying the right shade of lipstick (Russian Red), she crept into the bedroom with a sizzling hot frying pan, still spitting oil from the stir-fried veggies. 63

 Danny looked so adorable and peaceful, like a big, dopey puppy dreaming with the pillow cradled in his arms, a smile on his gorgeous face. She didn’t want to wake him. No...that would be so RUDE! 64

Katie stood above her lover, pan raised high above her head, and struck him as hard as she could. 65

The blow was clean, vicious, and resulted in a long, eggshell-thin crack that opened up at his hairline, growing wider until dark, cherry-red blood bubbled to the surface. It was so beautiful how the liquid spilled like wine down Danny’s temples and forehead, dripping off his chin, the bright red such a spectacular contrast to his luminous white skin. 66

With great difficulty she managed to drag him over to the kitchen. Blood poured out of the large, gaping wound, the smell of metal teasing her nostrils. 67

She took out a bottle of vegetable oil and began rubbing it all over his poor, beaten, sex-flushed body, her clit throbbing as she grasped his beautiful penis, oiled it, and mechanically did the same to his testicles, buttocks, arms, legs, face. He had hair on his chest, which Katie loved, but when it came to eating it wasn’t all that appetizing. 68

On the counter was a cookie tray with all the necessary tools for her procedure: scalpel, scissors, chef knife, and toothpick. Katie picked up the scalpel, intent on removing the eyes first. Before she could even pierce the thin, gelatinous substance of his cornea, he twitched, lashes fluttering. 69

“You’re just having a bad dream”, Katie reassured him. She stroked his thick, oily hair with the scalpel. “Go back to sleep, love.”70

“What are you doing?” Danny asked groggily, his face covered in blood. “Is this one of your sadistic little fantasies? And why is there blood all over me?!”71

“What’s the matter, don’t want to play anymore?” Katie pouted as she licked oil off his glistening dick. 72

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Starving, the beast allowed her to explore the rest of him, suckling on the greasy, perfect skin with her red cherub lips. 74

“This is sick”, he stated matter-of-factly, his voice cracking in fear. “You need help, Katie. See a psychiatrist and get help. We can just forget about this whole thing...pretend it never happened, ok? You’re scaring me.”75

“I’m quite sane, thank you”, Katie shot back, offended. “I WAS planning on a fancy dinner for tonight, but if you don’t shut up you’ll spoil it! Just let me do my work.”76

“You mean just let you dissect my body like some morbid biology project?” Danny was furious. “I’m not joking anymore. Let me go, Katie!”77

“You’re bleeding”, Katie said. “Here, let me soothe those wounds.”78

She closed her mouth on the deep, ragged cut in his scalp and pushed the tip of her tongue inside, slitting it open even wider so fresh blood oozed out. Danny howled in pain, his fists beating against the counter until the knuckles bled. 79

No longer amused by her lover’s childish antics, Katie impaled his neck with the scalpel, tearing open his jugular so a thick spurt of blood gushed out, dousing Katie’s face like his cum had earlier. It sprayed all over the ceiling; the cupboards and carpet.80

“Now look what you did, what a mess!” 81

She twisted the scalpel a few good times before wrenching it out, satisfied when Danny gurgled and screamed, choking on his own blood, his teeth a brilliant white against the dark, scarlet sheen.82

The sound was almost inhuman; a wet, strangled groan full of unspeakable agony. He went limp. His eyes turned glassy, like a doll’s, while the lips remained frozen in a warped shriek of pain.83

Katie took the scissors; her apron now bathed in blood, and made small, precise cuts, snipping off all the toes and fingers to use as a garnish. She scooped out both eyeballs, carved out the jaw (oh, but his beautiful teeth would make such a splendid necklace!). 84

Prying open his ribcage under the dim, florescent lights, Katie was amazed by how intricate the human body was; all those little nerve endings and receptors strung together like Christmas lights.85

Her workplace was getting messy, so, being the perfectionist she was, Katie poked around the house for some newspaper to lay down on the table. 86

For thirty-five minutes she sawed, chopped, diced, and peeled every inch of flesh. 87

She placed Danny’s thigh in the oven along with his severed hands, feet, and shoulders. Everything else could be stewed in the crock pot—but that would take time. 88

His vital organs, scalp and hair Katie disposed of; his eyeballs stomped on until they became gooey blobs and were flushed down the toilet, nothing but mashed-up egg yolk with brown pinpoints for irises. 89

His blood was far too delicious to waste, so she poured it into a wine glass, sipping on the exquisite liquid while Danny roasted, the smell of crispy skin absolutely scrumptious to say the least. 90

“The chubby ones always make the best meals. Don’t they, Oliver?” 91

Perched on top of the television set was her fat, ungrateful white cat with electric-blue eyes and a cream puff tail. He opened his pink mouth in a languid yawn, bored.92

“Oh, I think it’s ready!” Katie sashayed back to the kitchen, eager to delve into her masterpiece. She nearly slipped in a puddle of blood on her way to the oven, cursing at the sight of her red-splattered curtains, cupboards, and stove. 93

Fuck Danny for having so much blood in him, the fucker!  Katie thought. It needed to be mopped up, but now...now she could finally taste him.94

There were few things in life that gave Katie Wilkes as much pleasure as sinking her teeth into the golden-brown, succulent meat of a lover. 95

She changed out of the sticky apron and into her prettiest hand-made dress with the lacy red corset to go with her fabulous lipstick. To complete the look, she swirled her blonde hair up in a regal bun, pulled on a pair of thigh-high, brown leather boots, and played her favourite song: “Love Me Tender” by Elvis Presley. 96

It was magical evening.97

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THE END99

Author notes

I chose option 3: extremely gory horror (I hope that was gory enough for you).

For Cookie's contest I chose...
Algolagnia: fetish of pain
-Vampirism/Murphyism: fetish of drawing/drinking blood*
-Erotophonophilia: fetish of murder

My favorite pizza topping has gotta be bacon...definately bacon.



NOTE: For anyone confused with the "beast" reference: it's just a metaphor used to symbolize Katie's cannibalistic urges.

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  • emperess27
    August 18

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    Urgh, very gory Loads of great description. Poor guy, he seemed nice.. if a little easy, lol. But yeah, I liked this write, how she did it totally for her own pleasure. Loved the bit where she dresses up for the little dinner party she is having for herself. Having a pampered night by the looks of it!! Great story!


    • DogsLookUp silver member
      August 18
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      Hello Emperess27!

      Easy...yes, part of me thinks that I made Danny *too* easy.
      Katie has dinner parties with herself on a regular basis, that's how she copes with reality; like how some people listen to music or watch comedies.

      Thanks a bunch for the applause and comment! Much appeciated, sweetie.

      ~ EPO

  • mcfreeman
    August 15
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    Always a great write...even .. though...

    the tale is messy....

    beginning: 5, plot: 4, ending: 4.


    • DogsLookUp silver member
      August 18
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      Hello Mcfreeman!

      Why, thanks babe...
      *licks your earlobe*
      O.O

  • That was probably one of the most grotesque stories I have ever had the honor of reading. I'm very glad you entered it into my contest, and wish you the best of luck!


    • DogsLookUp silver member
      August 7
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      Hello SympatheticMisery!

      Most grotesque...thanks so much! I've seen worse stuff, though.
      Appreciate the feedback.


  • cole3313
    August 4
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    wow. It was sooo twisted I loved it! Great job you are deffinetly a finalist.


    • DogsLookUp silver member
      August 6
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      Hi Cole3313!

      Thank you so much!
      I'm pleased that you liked my story.

  • Very nice! Well crafted, flowing, and it rather oozes with darkness and death. It is everything I asked for in this contest. The beast metaphor was perfect. A marvellous description of that part of us which will always remain primordial. Brilliant write.

    • DogsLookUp silver member
      July 24
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      Hi Decadent Anomaly...

      Thank you for the applause, comment and trophy. I appreciate the fact that such a gifted writer would even glimpse at my work.
      I'm extremely flattered and pleased that you enjoyed it.


  • Allexis
    July 18
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    =D

    awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwesuuuuuuuuuuuuum!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


    • DogsLookUp silver member
      July 20
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      Hi Allexis!

      Thankkkkkkkkkkkkkyyyyyyyyyyyyyooooouuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu!!!!!!!!!!


  • FireByrd
    July 13

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    Honest and respectful. uh well, yeah you were right that was absolutely gross. You could be the next stephen king. Although He's on my hit list for now but well you are a good writer

    • DogsLookUp silver member
      July 18
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      Hi FireByrd

      Thank you for reading and commenting on my story.
      I don't think I'm even half as incredible as Stephen King, but I appreciate the huge compliment!
      What can I say I like gore lol.


    • Intoxica
      July 18
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      GASP!

      WHY IS STEPHEN KING ON YOUR HIT LIST?!??!?!?!???!?!??!!?!??!


      • DogsLookUp silver member
        July 18
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        Intoxica

        Um...whaddya mean?

        P.S. Thanks for the honourable mention!


  • lil.janie
    July 9

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    The others have said it all. I would just like to add that you played with spices and colours and aromas and all that (with words first of all) in such a way that it all made an unbelieveble, beautiful picture and story that, really, a profecional, bestselling horror authors could be a proud off. I'm new around here, but I will read everything you have ever posted here. I adore your style, it's perfect.
    And don't blush. You are - great. And now I am ashaimed of my own stories....

    • DogsLookUp silver member
      July 18
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      Hey lil.janie!

      Thank you sooo friggin' much! Wow, what a nice thing to say about my writing. It pleases me when someone notices the minor details, like the spices and the metaphors used to express Katie's grisly nature.
      Now I'm blushing... .
      Your comment made my day.


  • hsmlover1
    July 9
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    Exellent

  • *stomach growls* ^o^

    This was excelent. you held my full attention the entire time. It's rare to read sotries where the girl is the one in control.

    thanks for entering


    • DogsLookUp silver member
      July 8
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      Hi COokiE-mOnStEr!

      Thank you. I appreciate you taking the time to read my story, and I'm thrilled that it was a success.

  • loljk

  • im hungry *purring*


    • DogsLookUp silver member
      July 8
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      Thanks for the applause and comment.
      I'm pleased that you enjoyed my story.

  • Intoxica
    July 7
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    Reading it again, though, I can't help but notice how early after a severe head wound Danny starts yelling.
    But I guess the point of this story is not realism but simply DEVOUR.

  • Intoxica
    July 7

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    I really liked this story.
    Great detail, great imagery.
    A delightful read for those of us who enjoy the occasional dinner plate of human!
    Unfortunately this cannot win THIS contest since it was more gory than scary...and the rules specifically said, no gore.
    Congrats on excellent writing skills, though.

    • DogsLookUp silver member
      July 8
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      Ok, I'm sorry for not reading the rules lol. Thank you for reading, commenting, and giving me applause as well.
      Appreciate the feedback.


  • Asfand
    July 5

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    Nicely done! Excellent eye for detail! The descriptions made me cringe! Very good story! I like the narrative too and some of the imagery is well-written!


    • DogsLookUp silver member
      July 8
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      Thank you so much, Asfand!
      I'm glad that you enjoyed my story. The applause and comment is much appreciated.

  • that was a really good story, it had me gagging here and there because it had alot of gore, but i love gore. I love how you have her character being one minute all sweet and innocent and the next about to eat you. one part "She scooped out both eyeballs" reminds me of the movie See No Evil with the actor kane about a guy that kills his victims and then scoops out their eye balls. But instead of a evil man, its a sudistic woman and instead of just killing them she eats them. Bravo, espero leer más de su excelente escrito y me inclino ante ustedes, porque ustedes son verdaderamente un gran escritor, which means Bravo, I hope to read more of your excellent writing and i bow to you, because you are truly a great writer!

    • DogsLookUp silver member
      July 8
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      Wow, thanks so much for the wonderful and detailed comment!
      I'm flattered that you think I'm a great writer.
      Well, I try anyway.
      Your feedback, comment, and applause is deeply appreciated.

  • Wow, this was incredible, I'm not into the whole gore stuff, but this was descriptive with out being disgustingly graphic. I'd write more but other people have already covered my thoughts with their comments, anyways very well written and the wonderfully descriptive language use kept me intrigued to the end. and what would human flesh taste like? you got me curios haha

    • DogsLookUp silver member
      July 8
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      Hey Pyrochick777!

      Thank you for reading, commenting, and giving me applause on my story.
      I'm so glad that you enjoyed.
      Also, I believe that roasted human flesh tastes like chicken.

  • Marta gold member
    July 5

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    This was well written--stephen king better watch himself, the younger generation is catching up to him. Lol. I didn't have any problems with the structure, format or subject. It's not my usual read so I decided why not? If you were here you could have some red wine and chocolate covered ants, since you aren't I will toast you--nicely done.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

    • DogsLookUp silver member
      July 8
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      Hi Marta!

      Oh my gosh, are you comparing me to King, the God of Horror?
      I'm flattered beyond words. Thank you very, very much. I appreciate the applause, comment, and how highly you think of me as a writer. It's nice to know that my writing gives people pleasure. Hugs for the inspiring words!

  • WOWWW. Erm..interesting.
    In all seriousness.. the start reminded me of the movie 'Dahmer' where he's walking around a clothing store looking for a victim.. I don't know if you're familiar with that serial killer but he did consume human flesh, and Katie was like the girl version? haha.

    Amazing story, seriously. Pictured it all in my head and visualized everything. I liked the idea of the 'beast' inside of her.. Never judge a book by it's cover ay? A pretty girl with a sick twisted head I love it.

    As for 'gross' to be perfectly honest I feel hungry after reading this..

    10/10

    • DogsLookUp silver member
      July 8
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      Hello JaimeVigilante!

      Yes, I've heard of Dahmer before...he was especially brutal to his victims. Even though I have never seen the film, I know that he was a cruel, tormented, and terrifying man who dined on humans regularly. Katie is very similar, for she stalks young males in the mall, drags them back to her house like a spider, and seduces them before feeding time.
      Thank you for the applause and lovely words. I'm pleased to hear that you enjoyed my story.


  • Otacon
    July 4

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    I like the idea, but I didn't personally like your writing style. Some things I did like, some things I didn't.

    It's too....I don't know. I just didn't like it that much.
    You're not a bad writer at all. I'm just being picky.

    Some things I did like though:

    "Prying open his ribcage under the dim, florescent lights, Katie was amazed by how intricate the human body was; all those little nerve endings and receptors strung together like Christmas lights."

    ^ I lol'd :3.

    "The blow was clean, vicious, and resulted in a long, eggshell-thin crack that opened up at his hairline, growing wider until dark, cherry-red blood bubbled to the surface. It was so beautiful how the liquid spilled like wine down Danny’s temples and forehead, dripping off his chin, the bright red such a spectacular contrast to his luminous white skin."

    Now that, was excellent.

    Actually, from your warning, I was expecting a lot more bloodshed. Maybe a massacre or two.

    Good job and all, good luck on the contest :3

    • DogsLookUp silver member
      July 8
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      Hi Jesus Lizard!

      Aww, I'm sorry to hear that you're not a fan of my style. I tend to sugar-coat my words with description, which takes away from the story and can distract the reader. I'm trying to lay off those blood-soaked details, but it's difficult since I happen to be observant by nature. Yeah, this could have been gorier indeed...
      I originally wanted Katie to dine on Danny's internal organs and slurp up his intenstines like spaghetti, but too much gore = little substance (at least in my opinion).
      Thanks for the applause, comment, and wishing me luck on the contest.

  • I love this. Too gory! Psfffffff That is stupid! I loved the juicy-ness of the every word. It actually made me want to try some human flesh... Not that I haven't been tempted to before, but this made me crave and want to be there. You're an excellent horror and erotica write. The best I know. And I love reading every single story. And this is my favorite so far. The intensity and detail leaves wussy's scared shitless and crying to their mamas and the tough-est dudes looking around the corner and never trusting pretty blonds. I truly LOVE this piece.
    You have to right more cannibal stories. They are absolutely delectable.
    Oh and I was thinking of Sick Sick Sick also. It was closely similar in just the formation of the idea.
    Thank you for another AWESOMELY GREAT read, darling! I enjoy them much.
    Right more! Please! I'll get on my knees and beg!
    Aven.

    • DogsLookUp silver member
      July 8
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      Hey CrazyCutter!

      Hmm, the best horror and erotica writer you know? I'm gonna have to give that one to Tallblondie, but thanks a bunch for the divine compliment.
      There is a lack of cannibal stories on this site, but don't worry, I'll be sure to fix that.

  • Katie's whole nature is strange but so interesting. She's beautiful and a perfectionist and has this air of materialism, but she happens to be a cannibal. It's such a bizarre combination. And I kind of dig it. it's different from Lecter, who gave us intellect while he cut open skulls, and Katie brings something flashy and almost selfishly glamorous to the dinner table.

    I thought the affection between Katie and Danny was a bit much when they met at the store, like when they touched noses. It didn't have the hunting vibe to it. However, I liked it when she ran her hands over his chest, like she was inspecting his skin on whether it would taste good or not.

    I liked the sex in this piece. it was different from what I've read from you. it was more urgent and burning. it felt so tangled and hot and crazy.

    "She gasped as flesh pounded against flesh, slapping deliciously in perfect sync with the flimsy headboard and the smell of burning meat, sex, and murder that shimmered like gossamer insect wings in the kitchen, in her head."

    -I loooooved that. it was gorgeous, stunning, and such a frenzy. it made the situation feel real yet dream like. we don't believe she's going to kill him but at the same time, in our gut, we know it's impossible for her not to.

    The tongue in the open wound was genius. I've never seen that done anywhere before. and it was the kind of thing I could feel happening to me as I read it. my toes curled.

    I've always wondered what a person would taste like. I mean, not I'm going to go a rampage and start seducing victims or anything, but I'm just so curious. but I don't think I'd be able to eat a person knowing it's a person.

    This was another very impressive story. it was different from modern-day horror stories. and the sex element was completely different given the horror situations. it movies it's all tits and mindless bouncing but this had so much texture to it. there was a lot of heat. a black widow kind of heat.

    excellent job darling.

    xxx

    • DogsLookUp silver member
      July 4

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      As usual, the Comment Queen has graced my page yet again with her awesomeness . When I was writing this story, I was extremely pissed off, depressed, and sexually aggressive. Like a nest of maggots these feelings pulsed, thrived, and crawled together inside me. The only way I could release that inner turmoil without killing someone was to spew out this story.

      I'm pleased that you took the time to read, comment, and give me applause. I'm not into cannibalism either, but dang, what the heck would a roasted human taste like?

      Thanks again *blows kisses to you*. Your opinions inspire me so much, just like your writing.

      EPO

      • hahaha me, the Comment Queen? I feel honored but I believe that title truely belongs to you my dear. I adore what you have to say :]]]]]

  • Firstly I am glad for the song I was listening to while I was reading it. It reminded me very much of the film clip. [If you haven't seen it- its called sick sick sick by queens of the stone age.]

    Now onto matters at hand-Did that stir your appetite ?

    Do watering eyes, and other wet, hard places count? Well for one you definitely scared the shit out of me. Yet at the same time, scarily enough -& I don't support it- But it made me really want to know what the taste would be like. Your descriptions put me in her shoes, you write it so well I was salivating to taste Danny too.

    I am sitting in my chair pretty much wanting to read it over and over and over again, and I damn will know I will come back to it wanting to read it. It was beautifully written. You have to know I am going to be forever envious of your descriptions and fluent language. The whole story flowed like the rick Scarlett blood from Danny's head.

    It is are when I comment on a story that I have next to know words to describe how I feel about this a story, and I will admit I am having trouble. I just keep biting my tongue. Wanting to get inside the page- Wanting to do things with her, experience them first hand. It played out like a movie in my head, crisp and clear... -shudders-

    Some lines I loved :

    .He was the curious little moth trapped in her lantern; wings flapping helplessly against the luminous, honey-gold bulb.

    .She gasped as flesh pounded against flesh, slapping deliciously in perfect sync with the flimsy headboard and the smell of burning meat, sex, and murder that shimmered like gossamer insect wings in the kitchen, in her head.

    Jesus.
    I want to scream.
    Can I scream?
    WRITE MORE ...

    For your first cannibal story – I think you have excelled yourself way beyond any cannibal story I have ever read. And I am not just saying it. Its the damn honest truth.

    You have triggered something... I can't put my finger on just yet.
    Brilliance.

    *Shock*
    Blair

    • DogsLookUp silver member
      July 4
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      Stop it, you're making me blush!!!

      Thanks so much for the beautiful comment, Blair! I'm not only thrilled that you enjoyed my story, but honored to have such a talented writer even glimpse at what I have to offer .
      Your review made my day, no, YEAR. It humbles me to know that I can make people feel something with my writing; it's a gush of pride like no other. Appreciate the applause as well ^^. *Smothers with kisses* Thank you, thank you!

      EPO

  • Eeeeeewww This was Gross!!!


















    XD






    Haha I love it when you read a warning and you get the urge to act against it.
    Its like with the ps3 game start up window, "Do not turn console off when this symbol appears at the top of the screen."
    I get so tempted to just hit the restart button on my playstation....Just to defy the machine's orders. XD haha


    Well....That was off subject.....GREAT STORY!!!
    I'm not a fan of cannibalism at all. BUt I really enjoyed your story. It was well written and had good descriptions.
    For being a vegetarian/hippy/goth I would have to say this is sickly awesome!


    Far out, yours truly, CRAN

    • DogsLookUp silver member
      July 4
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      Hi Cranberry!

      Lol, I love your Playstation comparison to my story.
      Yeah, usually when we see a warning, or even an R-rated movie, we're like "Eew, that is sooooo gross! Why would I even want to watch it anyway?" But we usually end up watching; for human beings are curious creatures.

      Thanks so much for reading, commenting, and all the applause.
      I'm pleased that you enjoyed my work.

      EPO

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