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It was about ten o’clock. I didn’t want to listen to his complaints. Noise and waggling over the empty beer bottles: 2
- Bitch.3
I never was. 4
Swallowed my tears, took my car keys and went out. When did it go wrong? Five? Ten years ago? Or maybe it was like that from the beginning.5
I sat in the car, pondering.6
Rain. It drizzled on the car's windscreen. Turned on the wipers. The street was wet. Multicolored with lights.7
Almost midnight. Turned on the key. The car answered. Nice. I took a deep breath. Just felt like pushing the gas down to top speed.8
Another deep breath. All my life went the wrong way. Maybe I had to go the wrong one-way street way, to see the other car's lights in front of me. Then crash. Darkness. Nothing. But there are some strangers not guilty for my pain. I am not suicidal. I never was. Where did these thoughts come from?9
Two hours later. Bus station. A man. Alone. He has a paper in his arms. I saw the word: Nowhere. Nice place, nowhere. Went to the junction and turned back. I could drive him there.10
Offered him to enter the car. His face was pale, but nice. Eyes dark like blueberries. His voice with an accent, different, low:11
- Good evening. Thank you.12
He put his bag on the floor, next to the back seat.13
I saw that he was tired.14
- We go the same way – I said.15
- Nice.16
- OK then.17
He kept silent from a while. Then asked:18
- Why are you alone on the road? It is midnight.19
- I know.20
- You didn’t answer. Are you not afraid of strangers?21
- I am not alone. You are here.22
His eyes surprised, curious. A shadow passed over his face:23
- You didn’t answer me yet.24
- Maybe I want to be alone. 25
- Funny. Then why did you stop to pick me up?26
- Maybe it wasn’t a good idea to be alone. And your destination seems to be good.27
I heard his grinding teeth. He turned his head. I asked him:28
- You are on the road too. Why?29
- I need to think about something.30
- Love?31
- How did you know?32
- I can recognise that on your face.33
- She left me. With no obvious reason.34
- What have you done to her?35
- Nothing. I was good to her. Mostly.36
- Lie like a man… I said.37
- What?38
- Good reason…39
He stared at me like I dropped from the moon.40
- Do you love her?41
- I was in love…42
- But, do you love her?43
No answer.44
Rain. Thunder. It was difficult to drive. Wipers can’t wipe away a rain. The car started “coughing”. He said.45
- We should stop somewhere. I know a good place. It is not too far…46
- I have no money to pay.47
- I would. I could fix up your car.48
- Are you sure?49
- I can make a button fly to the sky. – He smiled.50
- What’s your job?51
- I am an engineer and physicist. What is your job?52
- Novelist.53
- Nice… words. Lots of words. What are you doing with your words?54
- Making my own world.55
- Could you make one for me?56
- Maybe…Where are you from? – I asked him.57
- My home is here. Not your town, but not too far from here. I was living in USA for years. Worked for NASA. Ten years ago I came back.58
- Why?59
- Homesickness.60
- Yeaaa…61
- A nice café and hotel are close to this road.62
- But…63
- What?64
- But… I started to stammer.65
- No but's…I can pay. I have enough money. Your car is almost dead. I will fix it up in the morning. It is too late now.66
I saw the lights to the right. I turned the steering wheel blinking to the right and slowed down. Sound of wet tires on concrete.67
The parking lot was full. Found a place far from the lights. He covered my shoulders with his dusty jacket. 68
When we entered the café my hair was wet. A little table next to the window was available. Rain.69
He said:70
- Your eyes are sad.71
- Who cares…?72
- I do.73
- You don’t know me.74
- Maybe.75
- You can’t heal my heart. – I answered.76
- Oh, here we are. Heart. Again the same old story.77
I played with my coffee spoon. He looked into my eyes.78
- Your eyes are very nice. Blue eyes. Blue eyes.79
- Really? Thank you.80
- Also, I can see something green, like springtime leaves and grey…81
- Yes? I started to pay more attention.82
- Like… like mist.83
- What is that? Flirting?84
- Ha, ha, ha…no. Maybe… - I am just happy to be here with you.85
- Why?86
- What why?87
- Yes, why happy?88
- I am not sure. It’s just because… - He waved with his left hand.89
- What’s about your love? You gave up?90
- I don’t know. One love could be healed with another one…91
I turned my eyes towards the window. Another? Other?92
He whispered with smile. Nice smile.93
- You need a good hot shower. You will catch a cold.94
He left money on the table, under the tab, covered it with his empty cup. That was for his chocolate and for my coffee. My coffee was still there untouched…95
Receptionist: 96
- Sorry, we have only one room available.97
He took the room key. A small room with a small bathroom.98
After my shower he said:99
- Mmmmm… Nice scent. Where do you want to sleep?100
- Do I have a choice?101
There was only one bed for two. One simple chair and a table with a Bible. A mirror on the wall. 102
- May I choose the side? I asked with smile. - Right side? Just have to dry and to comb my hair. 103
- May I do that for you?104
- If you like…105
Didn’t notice when he was back from the bathroom. Just his low, deep breathing in the night, behind my back and his warm hand over my body, close to my left breast.106
When I woke up, it was ten in the morning. Hot chocolate and croissant were there, next to my side. The other side of the bed was empty. I saw him through the window. Jumped into my jeans and T-shirt. He was there, next to my car. Sun rays were on his hair, next to the left ear touching his silver. Impressive side view. I took my breakfast and went out:107
- Thank you.108
- What’s the time?109
- It's a quarter past ten.110
He moved his shoulder and neck as if he felt pain there. Then said:111
- Now we can go.112
- Together?113
- Together.114
- Where?115
- Nowhere…116
I heard again his clear, low voice.117
- Come with me.118
- I need my toothbrush.119
- I have a new one in my bathroom.120
- I forgot my bra…121
- I didn’t notice that. 122
Then he changed the subject:123
- Do you like fruits? I have a lot of fresh strawberries in my fridge. Do you like strawberries?124
- Yes. I like fruits. Strawberries are my favourites.125
- Do you like it with whipped cream?126
(To be continued…)127
Author notes
Tingle, tingle, tremble toes,
she’s a good fisherman,
catches hens, puts ’em inna pens.
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Wire blier, limber lock,
three geese inna flock…
one flew east, one flew west, one flew over the cuckoo’s nest…
O-U-T spells out…
goose swoops down and plucks you out.
(Flight over cuckoo nest)
Second part: allpoetry.com/Story/1499689
Third part: allpoetry.com/Story/1542519
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Thank you Sammy for your nice comment and time to read my story as well as for good wishes.
It is not to hard to stay out of the rain because we are all over covered with snow.
Happy New Year 
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EXCELLENT
A very interesting, tantalising and teasing write. Luring the reader to the second part. I am a little perplexed with the dialogue and the lack of " " around sentences.
But I did enjoy it though ...
Best wishes for the contest.
Take care and stay out of the rain ...
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Thank you Lamia. I hope that you will be satisfied with part II and III.
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Cool. I love the casual feel to it all. Just like an ordinary conversation. Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest
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It could be much better on my language, but, I have done the best I can. I am glad tha t you like ik. Thank you for you nice comment.
~Sonja~ -
I loved this story. I felt like I was watching a foreign movie on IFC, which I love to do. The charactors are perfect, subtle, and yet they get on as though they have known each other for a lifetime. While their troubles are are individually powerfull, they share a common bond that makes them one with each other. Brilliant. Paggles
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Thanks for your comment. I am glad if you like it.
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thanks for entering my contest!!
this was nice to read..
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Thanks for your comment. This is different work and it was done to be unusual.
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Thanks for your comment. This is different work and it was done to be unusual.
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It was a little complicated, but it was really cool. You always seem to have interesting characters in your stories.
I like the way you do dialogue, different... but not so it's not organized...
Good luck
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Thank you for your very nice and precious comment. Yes, no name was used here. Life is very compicated sometimes, but not love. We are ready to make it complicated.
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excellent
This is a good unusual write, I found it very unique and honest
"Night on the Road" the story says so much within your writings.Your descriptions were very good and created good pictures in my mind. The love situation was complex and I kept wanting to know more about both people in the situation. Perhaps that will unfold as the story develops. The woman seemed to have a desperation within life ,the man seemed resigned to whatever was going to happened. A projection of being strangers although they were together. No names were used.They was an impersonal feeling about both people. It was a good write and captured my attention. -
Thank you for a very nice comment. I am working a lot of things at the same time, then I can't give any promise. I will try to do my best.
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I really like this story, although it's kinda unbelievable in some respects (but that's what stories are about i guess, stretching the boundries?), I like the format you use, it's straight to the point, you don't waste time on superfluous description, and the speech is more like thoughts than speech, it's a nice original format.
When will the next part be up do you think? x -
Thank you zee. This is just a fiction, but life could be unpredictable. Spoiled? Look around what people are doing! To love or to be in love is not spoiled. People are spoiled when the want to kill each other with no reason. But, yes, this is a little different work. Thank you for your patience.
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I enjoyed reading this and felt the characters, I think I would have preferred them not to have reached the point they did towards the end, for me it somehow spoiled something that you created admirably in the story, but thats just how I feel and its your story and your decision, it was a good read and I'm pleased I had the patience to read it from beginning to end. Thanks.
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