the foods in love

I had fed on her from across the room1

keeping her energy high with disinterest and eye contact2

she was playing billiards and trying not to notice me3

it was very amusing but as attractive as she was4

I knew she was only food and I fed deeply5

she got "a lil dizzy" as she put it and had to sit down6

she tasted like denim,perfume,beer,and sweat7

her heart was pounding and she was afraid of passing out8

and the fear was also delicious as she sweated and stared directly at me now9

one long draw as through a straw and she fell out of the chair10

I went back to my scotch and enjoyed the rush of energy I get from 11

feeding so deeply on someone like her12

she was vain and thought her looks made men her pawns13

my favorite kind of food I loved women like her14

when she hit the floor I cast invisibility on myself so I could get closer15

I wanted her to love me so I could feed on her often16

the men had gathered around to assist her and get her back up on her feet17

they parted for me as I was just a stranger and not much attention was paid18

as I grabbed her collar and put her back into her chair19

and marked her as mine in astral blue ink20

she asked for someone to call her a cab as she stared into my eyes 21

falling into the abyss of sleep that would recharge her 22

but she had to fight to stay concious, and I laughed 23

she was happy I was rescuing her and apologizing to me for being so drunk24

she was touching my face and speaking in hillbilly english25

about how she would meet me again anytime if I called her26

she couldn't remember her number but gave me her cellphone and said its in there27

help yourself28

the cab came and as they helped her in I told her to be here on thursdays29

to bring money,herb,and to dress sexy as I would be her guest30

she still comes every thursday and drinks till she passes out31

I play pool with her and she has never asked my name32

but calls me her boyfriend,I don't argue with the food33

besides she buys my scotch and smokes 34

I even let her take me to a motel a couple of times35

as I believe the food should be kept healthy and energized36

every week she says I can't be real but clings to me as I drink her essence37

until she passes out and apologizes for being a drunk38

she is a banquet of emotions and I like her that way39

delicious and pretty like all my food40

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  • SsshVoices
    August 24, 2005
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    its an energy vampire but he is also an essence vampire and he is consuming everything about her including her delusions and illusions,in fact these are the very flavours that atrract him to such women

  • Solo-the-drifter
    August 23, 2005
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    So like... is he an energy vampire? Or is he "feasting on her apearance"? Usually I get when things are metaphores, but this was hard to conprehend. Never-the-less, it is very well written. Good luck.


  • Porcelain Doll
    August 21, 2005
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    Oh wow... heh. o.o Definately held my interest... I like this. It isn't something you see everyday. But you should have read my rules... check them, and fix what you've forgotten, or I'll have to disqualify you I really like this
    ~Amy

  • unsexypenguin
    August 21, 2005
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    Damn... that's deep. Very sexy too. I like it a lot. That would be a good relationship. She gets a boyfriend, he gets food, they both get sex, what could be better? Other than the I's not being capitalized this was very beautifully done. I'm in awe. I visualize this. Great job and good luck in the contest!

    -Miranda