The scars go past the skin,1
Seeping into my heart,2
I close my eyes,3
I wait for the darkness to start,4
Tears drip down my cheeks,5
The darkness consumes me,6
My soul has disappeared,7
The darkness controls me freely,8
I am breaking down,9
I feel defeated,10
I can't make a sound.11
Author notes
writers block. Sorry.
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You had writers block? Hehe you should see what my stories are like when I do. But this is good,you have a great way of describing it so people can understand how its' viewed
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You should really get an account at www.allpoetry.com you clearly have a talent for poetry. I don't believe you wrote this with writers block
. All your stories/poems seem to be vibrating off dark things. I hope that you can find the light again. If it's inspiration you need to kick you out of writers block I suggest searching something random on www.photobucket.com Perhaps something like 'rose' or 'trapped' or maybe even 'sunset'.
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This was about writer's block? Or you had writer's block when you wrote this? You have to be kidding me...This was really well written. And I sympathize with you. From this poem and the previews of your other poems it seems as if you're in a dark place right now.
I hope you find your way back into the light.
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It's really emotional and quite sad, but I think it's interesting bcoz it's a such a different style of writing.
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It's actually not a really different style of writing. There are lots of well written stories and poems about topics like this one. I guess you are just used to writing about what people would classify as 'girly' topics such as modelling and cat fights.
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lol i didnt think of that :-)
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Really good I love how you descrined darkness, I loved the lines The darkness consumes me,
and My soul has disappeared Great job
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This is really good,but oh.my.god! so sad. it just made me think like, the world is ending so lets just end it!!! Really great when a story can bring out those emotions!
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This is nice. I like this. It's good.
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Girl, the last thing you have is writer's block. You have the opposite, writer's glory. This was brilliant, descriptive! I love how you described the emotion, it's really powerful!
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I LOVE IT
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Brilliantly goth, or is that emo nowadays? Anyway, a good old fashioned teenage poem about depression.
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