So Speak

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Never die.
I don't thik my heart could take it.
There's so much I've yet to say
So little that I've decided to do.
Don't die.
If you leave, I'll have nothing but a memory
Just the thought of what was
What might have been. . .
Hold on.
Just a little longer, love.
The light has to wait
Now's not the time to go without me
So stay.
Keep your heart pumping away
Don't let these feelings end
I'm not ready for the words that will declare it.
Too late.
That's all the doctors say.
Your heart beats once, twice. . . no more.
The flatline announces the end.
Body bag.
I'd never seen one before
Now I know why.
It's proof that it's time.
So speak.
Find the words in me
The ones I never wanted to say.
The words that make this real.
Two little words. . .
"Good-bye."2

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Author notes

This is for anyone who has lost the person they love. Letting them go is so hard, but it's too hard to linger on nothing but a memory. So say what you need to, in order to move on with your life.

You understand it? It's kinda full of metaphors....

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  • BloodyMurder
    July 11

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    Creatively enticing. I caught one error in the first line. "Think"
    Way to go, ove, you really write 'em well.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Jack Necron
    July 7
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    This hit me hard on a personal level. Mostly for the fact that I, like everyone, have had love ones go. It's hard, and it takes a long time to heal. And even then, the scab of it falls off and you feel the pain once more.

    This was beautifully done, and you can tell that this was done from the heart and soul.


  • the class
    July 1

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    this is so cute. I've never lost anyone really close to me, so you've really enabled me to feel what it's like. well done


  • Paper.thin.paradox
    June 30

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    This was really amazing. You captured the emotion very well. Great job!! It's brilliant! Keep up the good work


  • Shadow06
    June 30

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    I understood it very well. The metaphors were excellent. I can also relate to this poem. One of my friends passed away and it was hard to say goodbye.

  • Peace123
    June 30
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    wow...that's all i can say.

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