Tanner looked at his brother Hunter and cursed. "You want me to take one of your wounded birds into my home? To care for my son? Have you lost your ever loving mind?"1
"You didn't see her, bro. She was broken. The girl is terrified and we have no idea where Jackson Haley is. You've got your house set up like Fort Knox, there's no way he could ever get to her here."2
Tanner scrubbed a hand over his face and sighed. "Does she even know how to care for children?" he asked wearily.3
"She has a degree in early education, which would adequately prepare her for home-based childcare."4
"Ok, when does she arrive?" He asked, resigned to his role as protector.5
"Tomorrow." Tanner's green eyes narrowed. 6
"You didn't plan for the possibility that I might say no?"7
"Nope, you're a softie. How could you say no?" Hunter grinned at him. "Anyway, we're twins, that means I know what you will and won't do." Hunter dodged the flying paper weight. "You'll thank me for this, bro." He said over his shoulder as he walked out of Tanner's office.8
to be continued...9
Author notes
Continuation of the story.
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Tis great...wonderful writing and I can see Myself there indeed. Sadly it looks as if tis the last chapter.
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Twins that fight and let emotions fly. Good, this shows the impact of a close knit family. That is also good. Wonderfully done with this chapter, but I must say, if put into a book, will need to be longer.
Thoughts would be, what was the officer thinking to himself as he goes to his brother with this, yes, I know you could not be in his head, but you could picture it to get this far.
Riftkin
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Liking It
This is getting more detailed and much more in depth with emotion. I like the flash to the brothers, it takes the focus off the main character a bit adding complexity to the story as well. Good job with this one. I hope you let me know when the next piece is written.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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GREAT WORK!
Hey.. Its going PERFECT- the dialogues, emotions, everything!
Loved it. the progress in the 3 Chapters also show a progress in your writing, my fav- this chapter- short, sweet, but a complete scene.
Take your time, but pl do notify me when you post the 4th chap.
Keep writing,
Love,
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ohhh, i cant wait for more. I want more..
Thanks again for sharing your story. I am going to bed now sis, and I will talk to you tomorrow.
Love ya,
Tammy
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Hmmm... This is somewhat interesting so far. We could use more description of Nessa's internal conflict, I think. She has to be feeling pretty nervous about living with a strange man right after she got raped. Well, I'm not going to tell you how to write your story, but I look forward to more. I hope Jackson gets castrated by a rusty fence.
Mike
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