Not Worth Dying For - Preview

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“Tell me, Mr. Turner, have you ever watched someone die?” Pryor asked me. 3

I tried my best to stand tall next to the old yet daunting figure, but I felt my shoulders slumping under pressure. I looked him in the eye and noticed a particular glitter I hadn't seen on his face before. A revolver had apparently materialized in the hand he held at his hip, and he held it in a delicate fashion, as though it were as familiar and dear to him as his own child. 4

Then I looked across the table at James. It was saddening to see him in such a position, especially since he had done so much to conceal himself as an arms dealer, from the flamboyant way of dress he chose to his flippant and positive disposition. It didn't take long to figure out whose name was on the bullet which waited so eagerly in its chamber. James was nearly in tears—I would have been too. 5

“I take from your silence,” Pryor spoke again, “that you haven't witnessed death before. But with your cold and heartless ways, I'm sure you'll do fine handling the experience. It's why you were brought into this, don't you remember?” The gun rose so that it was parallel to the floor, aiming in James' direction. “So, Mr. Turner, will you answer my question? Have you ever watched someone die?” 6

The hardness in my face was beginning to melt away, I could feel it. Fear was beginning to show through. This wasn't what I wanted! 7

I closed my eyes and shook my head, waiting for the sound of the gunshot. 8

“Open your eyes, Mr. Turner, or it will be your life that ends today.” 9

He would have done it, I was sure of it. My eyes snapped open as if awaking from a bad dream, except this time the dream was still there. James had pushed himself backwards against the wall, petrified with his hands up. His eyes were on me with the most pitiful “please help me” look emanating from them. I really wish I could have helped him. 10

“You see, Mr. Turner, there are many people in this world,” Pryor said in an eerily calm voice. I watched his index finger slide down onto the trigger of the revolver. “Some of them cooperate, like I'm sure you will learn to do one day. And others... well,” he let out a quick laugh and smiled, “others just get in the way.” 11

Author notes

I decided to bring back Clive Turner in a different kind of story. I've gotten into the spy/mystery/suspense genre lately and find myself quite enthralled when reading it, so I wanted to try my hand at it.

This preview is an excerpt from a scene that will happen later on in the story, and I'm using it to advertise this new story.

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  • KillerQueen
    September 11

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    Omg.
    This is so intense!! I reeeeaaally want to see where you can take this!!!!!!!! I'm hooked. Please keep writing more!!

    I really like it - it has great potential.


  • MikeyMurder
    July 21

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    Wow!

    Your talent shows yet again! You should be proud of your talent and nurture it, keep on writing! I love this. It's a very on-the-edge-of-you-seat preview. Lots of readers (including me) will want to dive straight into this story without any hesitation and I definatly recommend this story to others. yet again amazing. Well done.

  • I always liked this story...


  • Kagamine Rin
    July 17

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    This is really good. D:

    And amazing preview to a story series... Such an outstanding and amazing prologue~ :3


  • hsmlover1
    July 9
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    Loved it good job

    Hsmlover1

  • Okay, I loved this.

    Then again, I like most thriller or killing-involved kind of story so I knew I was gonna fall for this.

    I love your sentence structure, the wording and the whole thing itself.

    You did an amazing job!

  • wow...that was breathtaking and held me on every word. The detail was just enough, thought maybe you could use a bit more on James...I was saddened to find that you didn't know his fear just good enough. But maybe if you added a little bit more about him, as the focus of his death is a main subject in this part. I am looking forward to reading more.

    Other then the thing about James I didn't see anything re4ally jump out at me, but it was really good. I hope you do just as well with your chapters.


  • Violette silver member
    July 6

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    An excellent teaser, best of luck when it comes to writing the rest. Not my usual story but excellent style just the same.

  • Nauck Wind Song Review

    Good Sir;

    Clive Cluster Your work reminds me of his, and would say you may like to try if you have not read some of his work. The frist one I read was "Shock Wave" and really helped me pull my work together with "Elisheva The Way Stones"

    from what I have seen you have got real good thing going. as with those on writing.com say or should I say write...Write On my good friend Write On...

    God's Blessings
    Good Sir;
    God Country Family Common defense (with gun's)

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • donut221
    June 28
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    It is very well written. I cant wait till you complete the actual story.

  • Damn. You are gifted man, Ican tell you that much. And it would be awesome if you could read my oh-so-short stories and leave comments on how I could fix them up? That would rule, because I've always wanted to write and stuff, I even draw my own illistrations! But check out my stories if you want, I take every little bit of advice from every on who wants to give it. And again, you're writing rules!

  • wow. i really like it. i seriously do. i think its a really great start and u think u shuld continue writing it. its awsome...i culd visualize this happening in my head.but..wow...i love it.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

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