In my Head (some more :/)

Whisper to me.1

You love me.2

Not anything more or less.3

This comes from my heart.4

I love you.5

Dearly.6

Though I wish.7

I knew.8

Who that one I love was.9

Who are you?10

When will I find you?11

Do you exist?12

These questions.13

I'm asking myself.14

Are stupid.15

Why can't you just appear already?16

Or are you hiding?17

Or maybe I'm just blind.18

No, I would know now if you're there.19

But you're not.20

I hate you.21

And you.22

I dislike this feeling.23

I don't know how to decribe myself.24

I don't know where I am.25

I just don't know anymore.26

I don't care.27

Why must I be me?28

I hate myself.29

Only for the moment.30

Why, oh, why.31

My head moves too quickly.32

My body doesn't.33

My best friend betrayed me.34

Why, god why?35

Oh yeah.36

There's no god.37

Fuck god.38

I hate him.39

With all my heart.40

He never saved me.41

He never helped me.42

He never answered my damn prayers.43

What did I do?44

I don't rememeber doing anything.45

I did nothing wrong!46

I don't understand.47

I didn't do anything to make people mad.48

Yet they get pissed at me anyways.49

I wish..50

My storywrite friend would exist.51

In real life.52

They'd understand.53

I hope..54

Again, I ask myself.55

Why must I be me?56

I don't know.57

Author notes

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FUCK THE FUCKIN WORLD !!!!!!!
IM SORRY IM VERY CONFUSED AND PISSY =_=

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  • Glitflyer
    June 29, 2009

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    Cool poem... Well, sounds like what I've been through. And don't hate ur self 4 it.. Tried it but is never worth it.


  • RepartitionViolente
    June 27, 2009

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    Celia...Never hate yourself, and never let anyone tell you that you should. She was obviously not a good "best friend" if she would "Betray you" so easily.

    You now see why I am atheist.

    I don't seem like it, but honestly, if you ever need to really talk, or vent, just message me. Alright?


  • LovingRidicule
    June 27, 2009

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    Line 12: exhist>>exist
    Scratch out line 21, doesn't sound so good, you should express that emotion instead of using "ugh".
    Line 25: ro>>to
    Line 33: to>>too
    Line 38: Theres>>There's
    Line 47: no !!
    Line 50: pissy>>pissed (?)
    Line 52: same thing as line 12
    Line 57: first me>>I

    This was good though, and powerful. The God thing will drive you insane for a while, sometimes prayers are answered other times not but maybe with out you knowing it's for the best.

    Kepp on writing! Good job with this


    • CeliaBby
      June 27, 2009
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      Thank you so much I wasn't really watching for mistakes.. I was more blaghhh and duurr at the moment xD


  • XxXdead insideXxX
    June 27, 2009
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    Hello! I love your poem stroy thingys. They're alot like me. Well GOOD JOB BUDDY!!!!!!! HAHAHAHA.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Flightless Bird.
    June 27, 2009
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    :/ Hmm.
    Me likes.
    But hmm.
    >

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