Shaky Ground

Let shaky ground
Finally release itself
From under my feet
Please let go
So I can finally walk
Down my fated path
Without jumping the gaps
These feelings rise
When I'm alone
And only leave for brief
I want this ground
To finally break
So I'm not jumping around
I want to walk
Carefree as before
With a smile
On my heart and face.

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  • Shadow-Kissed
    June 25

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    Neat way to write the poem. I loved the lines

    These feelings rise
    When I'm alone

    They really pulled me in, well done.
    -Chantale

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