Moonlight

Into the tunnel I walk. I see no light, but darkness surrounding me with every step I take. Tears are falling down my face, dripping onto the cold, freezing floor. I scream, hoping that someone will hear me. The only responce I get is the echo of my voice, which makes me cry harder.1

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Suddenly, I hear footsteps running behind me. Fearing that I'll scream at any given moment, I clamp my hand over my mouth and run like a mad woman. Faster I hear the footsteps pounding on the concrete behind me. In return of those footsteps are my own, running faster and faster. Out of no where, I see light. As if it were magic, I step out into the sun, which blinds me for a few split seconds. I cover my eyes, sheilding them for a moment. My head is spinning. Unexpectedly, a pair of arms grabs me from behind, and I let out a yelp. I turn, only to see a boy with black, shaggy hair staring into my eyes. 3

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"Who are you?" my trembling voice asks.5

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"It' me. John."7

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"I'm Caitlyn. Where am I?"9

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"Caitlyn, look around." he says in a smooth voice.11

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I turn, and see exactly where I am. In front of me, I see a world full of happyness, with the sun shining bright overhead of me, and land streching as far as the eye can see. I look down, and all I see are clouds. I start to panic, thinking that I'll fall through. John grabs my hand and holds on tightly. I look into his eyes and he smiles.13

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"Are we..."15

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"It's called Heaven Caitlyn, and yes. We are. Don't you remember?"17

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Suddenly, memories flash back. I remember who John is. He...he was my boyfriend. I remembered that we were just in a car accident, but I never knew that I had died. A tear falls from my cheek, and I turn to John, hugging him tightly.19

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"I remember now." I mumble into his chest, smiling lightly, although he can't see it.21

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"I knew you would." he answers back. I turn around and tightly hold his hand, and start to walk in a place where I'll stay forever in love. Right here in Heaven.23

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  • This was a good write and a very nice read. I enjoyed the twist in the middle of it. At first I thought something bad was after the girl, but then it only turned out to be her boyfriend and they are in heaven. Good job with the suspense element. I think it might have been just a little short, but the story balances well enough with the suspense and emotion. Good job! Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!

  • a little bit short and sad but OK

  • dark blood
    June 25
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    it was really cool

  • that was ok but it could have used a little bit more backround story

  • annajiwon
    June 23

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    This is sad......... So... they got an accident and they died? Caitlyn now realized that she got an accident?? T.T

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