Into the tunnel I walk. I see no light, but darkness surrounding me with every step I take. Tears are falling down my face, dripping onto the cold, freezing floor. I scream, hoping that someone will hear me. The only responce I get is the echo of my voice, which makes me cry harder.12
Suddenly, I hear footsteps running behind me. Fearing that I'll scream at any given moment, I clamp my hand over my mouth and run like a mad woman. Faster I hear the footsteps pounding on the concrete behind me. In return of those footsteps are my own, running faster and faster. Out of no where, I see light. As if it were magic, I step out into the sun, which blinds me for a few split seconds. I cover my eyes, sheilding them for a moment. My head is spinning. Unexpectedly, a pair of arms grabs me from behind, and I let out a yelp. I turn, only to see a boy with black, shaggy hair staring into my eyes. 34
"Who are you?" my trembling voice asks.56
"It' me. John."78
"I'm Caitlyn. Where am I?"910
"Caitlyn, look around." he says in a smooth voice.1112
I turn, and see exactly where I am. In front of me, I see a world full of happyness, with the sun shining bright overhead of me, and land streching as far as the eye can see. I look down, and all I see are clouds. I start to panic, thinking that I'll fall through. John grabs my hand and holds on tightly. I look into his eyes and he smiles.1314
"Are we..."1516
"It's called Heaven Caitlyn, and yes. We are. Don't you remember?"1718
Suddenly, memories flash back. I remember who John is. He...he was my boyfriend. I remembered that we were just in a car accident, but I never knew that I had died. A tear falls from my cheek, and I turn to John, hugging him tightly.1920
"I remember now." I mumble into his chest, smiling lightly, although he can't see it.2122
"I knew you would." he answers back. I turn around and tightly hold his hand, and start to walk in a place where I'll stay forever in love. Right here in Heaven.23
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Comments
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This was a good write and a very nice read. I enjoyed the twist in the middle of it. At first I thought something bad was after the girl, but then it only turned out to be her boyfriend and they are in heaven. Good job with the suspense element. I think it might have been just a little short, but the story balances well enough with the suspense and emotion. Good job! Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!
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a little bit short and sad but OK
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it was really cool
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that was ok but it could have used a little bit more backround story

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This is sad......... So... they got an accident and they died? Caitlyn now realized that she got an accident?? T.T

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