the roses don't bloom anymore

the bitterness of dissonant chords1

she used to play on a broken down keyboard,2

reminded her of times like this.3

sometimes she'd cry herself to sleep,4

burying her ears in her pillow5

until the shouts of her parents6

became muffled, nearly unrecognizable.7

she took upon herself8

responsibility for their happiness,9

for every 10

shout, 11

curse, 12

and tear.13

she fell deeper into shame-14

broken hearted15

she lives invisible16

in a household filled only17

with conflict18

and the silence that follows 19

twelve years later20

this little girl, now full grown21

hiding in city that never sleeps22

sometimes still wakes up crying23

and buries her head in her pillow24

a relic from the past25

proof that pain never quite dies.26

Author notes

This is a collaboration with More Like War, we used option number one-we chose this option because we know each other well, and have been friends since second grade-and thought it'd be great to collaborate for this contest. Thank you so much for this opportunity-and the best of luck to you in judging!
Amanda and Abby

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  • March 10, 2006
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    i loved this.


  • gothangel08
    January 12, 2006
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    Things swell up and never leave

    Thumbs Up!!!! Hope you win the contest! This is a very good poem. I really like it. Pain is something that will never leave you, it may seem like it is all gone, but it is still inside of you, waiting to find someway to get out. It doesn’t have to bother you, but no matter how hard you try, it will always be there. Great poem and I hope you win.


  • dragondancer
    August 13, 2005
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    Judgement

    Interesting. I believe this is free-verse, no? Anyway, I'm rather flattered that you seem so adament about me setting up this such contest. Now then, the story-line here was most intriguing and it made me wonder if perhaps this was something more reflecting upon someone you know or something than just simply collaborating. *shrug* Anywho...

    Judgement:

    Part ONE. Based off of rules:
    (1-3) Excessive - - No - - - 10
    (5) Grammaticks - - Acceptable - - - 10
    (6) Placement - - Complete - - - 10
    (9) Comprehension - - Acceptable - - - 10
    (10) Collaboration Info - - Complete - - - 10
    Total: 50/50

    Part TWO. Based off of Personal Liking.
    Total: 35/50

    Overall Total: 75/100