The Calling

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Her name was Neda. A young woman whose name means ‘The Calling’. Her voice was just one among many peacefully protesting on the streets of Tehran yesterday.  I never knew her. I saw her for the first time on the news, after she had been gunned down by the Basij militia. Neda was shot through the heart while she stood watching the demonstration, alongside her music teacher.  As she lay bleeding on the pavement, her teacher cried out, in anguish: “Neda , don’t be afraid. Neda, don’t be afraid. Neda stay with me,” even as blood poured from her mouth and nose, even as the light left her eyes. 3

Her brutal murder, and that of many others at the hands of the militia, has only served to strengthen the resolve of many Iranians, who are sick of living under a repressive regime. In death, Neda has been called ‘the voice of Iran’.4

It all began last week with the Presidential election. Polls showed that Iranian opposition leader Mirhossein Mousavi was holding a tight race against incumbent President Mahmoud Ahmadinejad, and a sense of hope was building in the country. But when the polls closed, and votes were counted, Ahmadinejad had won by an overwhelming 62.6 percent. Allegations of election fraud rang out, and hundreds of thousands of Iranians rose up, in peaceful protest, demanding a re-count. 5

Not surprising, Supreme Leader Ayatollah Ali Khamenei came out in full support of Ahmadinejad, stating that his victory was ‘divine’, and banning further protests from Mousavi supporters. His words only stoked the fire, for the people took to the streets once again, many of them chanting Allahu Akbar (God is greatest), while straining to be heard over shouts and the sounds of gunfire. 6

Even with a media ban in place, brave protestors managed to use cell phones, and Twitter to get their stories out: images of people, young and old, being shot, or beaten on the head with batons, made their way to news stations around the world. Included in these was the video of Neda, the beautiful young woman slain by the Basij, and whose name has become a rallying cry for the people of Iran. 7

Neda didn’t know she would die that day. But, like the other protestors, she knew it was a possibility. Yet she did it anyway. She did it because she knew that change was not possible without sacrifice. She was a courageous young woman who forfeited her life in the name of democracy.8

If history has taught us anything, it is that the will of the people is stronger than any dictator. Neda’s death will not be in vain. Her voice can still be heard, and it reinforces the determination of the Iranian people in their struggle against tyranny. 9

Author notes

I wrote this in a hurry after watching the video of the brutal murder of this poor young woman. It was graphic, and shocking, and incredibly tragic.

Recent reports have confirmed that the man standing with Neda when she was shot, was not her father, but her music teacher. I have revised this post to reflect that.

Reports are still coming in as to the age of Neda. They have her ranging from 17-27, but almost all accounts have stated that she was a University student.I will make revisions as necessary, as new information becomes available.

I have also read that Neda has already been buried, and that the Iranian government had denied a funeral to be held for her, and has prohibited any prayer vigils to be held in her name in Mosques. Clearly they are frightened of this woman becoming a martyr for the people. Too late, I think.

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  • Touching little piece. We are exposed to so much killing and brutality that we've almost become numb to it. A little story like this reminds us how lucky we are to live under a democratic government. It also tells me that perhaps I shouldn't whine so much about my "problems."

    Of course, I won't stop whining. But it's certainly something worth striving for.

    Beautifully written, of course. My only complaint is that you start #4 with a conjuntion. Shame on you, especially since that sentence would be bolder without it.

    Oh, well, nobody's perfect

    "Her brutal murder, and many others at the hands of the militia, however, has only"

    That's how an uneducated person would do it

    beginning: 4, ending: 4.


    • Hatshepsut gold member
      July 8
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      Thanks for your review! I'm glad you liked it.

      As for the conjunction...I will compromise...I will remove the 'But' at the beginning of the sentence, but I don't like the 'however' in the middle of the sentence--so I will omit the conjuncion altogether.

      Thanks again!


  • Glitflyer
    July 3
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    Wow! *claps* Love this story!! Emotional but great


  • Valkyrie silver member
    July 2

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    I've avoided watching the video because I KNOW I'd bawl like a baby, too. Having small kids makes me pretty sensitive to tragedy, and I've stopped watching the news. I do still read some of the stories, and I'd heard about Neda right before you wrote this story. I can see how it drew you in, and you turned right around and poured all that emotion back out, with focus, and created a great report.

    The irony of Neda's name's meaning is not lost on me. I can't tell what Iran's future will be, but unrest is not a good place for any nation to be in.

    Superb crafting, Hat. It's good, I think, that we can still be touched by strangers' tragedy, that we can protest it, even from around the globe. We are all one human race. And now I'm tearing up.

    • Hatshepsut gold member
      July 3
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      Thanks Val! I am very easily affected by the news as well. You're right, we ARE all one human race; we come from the same place.

      Thanks again for the nice review! This sounds bad, but I'm glad I made you tear up!

  • graybeard silver member
    July 1

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    Hey Hatshepsut,
    A tragic and touching story you've written here. I was hopeful that Ahmadinejad would be defeated and the U.S. could again establish diplomatic relations with Iran. It seems to me that Ahmadinejad is trying to start a war, but why this should be so, I really can't fathom. Anyway this is a great write from you.

  • Nicely done!

    I haven't seen the video footage, but read about the incident. A sad sign that some things never change.

    You wrote this just after watching it? It shows. This is very compelling and reads as if you had been there.
    Sometimes putting your thoughts down on paper while they are fresh in your mind gives it a more intense and passionate feel.
    It came across in this piece and keeping it fairly short gives it more impact on the reader.

    Well written for doing it off the cuff like that.
    Greg

    • Hatshepsut gold member
      June 30
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      Thank you for your nice review!

      Yea, I was really affected by the footage. We all know that not everyone in the world enjoys the freedoms that we do, but when you actually see it.....it really brings that point home.

      Thanks again!


  • artaq gold member
    June 29

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    Wow!

    What a very powerful and well written story. Although it s sad it is also a very compelling piece.. Great Job!

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

  • Well written. Poignant, but still sad.

    Time will show what fires her death has sparked.


  • DoozerDan silver member
    June 26

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    You know, sometimes it's the short stories written quickly by a flash of inspiration that can be our best pieces. I 'enjoyed' this, it was tragic and sad. I must admit, I don't keep up with the news much, I find it too depressing, so this is the first I'd heard about this. But you paint the picture very well.

    A great little write, thanks for posting.


    • Hatshepsut gold member
      June 26

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      Why thank you, Dan! I appreciate your comment. BTW...I LOVE your avatar, or whatever it's called.


      • DoozerDan silver member
        June 26
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        Hehe. Yeah, I love my new avatar too, ThatTynGirl drew it for me.


  • Lawrie gold member
    June 22

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    Whoa my friend!

    You say you wrote this in a hurry? It is a remarkeable write and makes me wonder why you are not a journalist.

    I have not seen the footage but I have read about the incident and seen a clip on the news bulletins.

    I cannot add to what you have admirably described and I sincerely hope you are correct and that history will once again become the "present". Unfortunately, history also tells us that it will take more innocent deaths before the will of the people wins the battle.

    Who knows? Perhaps this incident could actually bring Islam and the rest of the world closer together, if the Islamic peoples would allow us to help.

    Well done my friend. You have written an article that ecompasses the thoughts and horror of all civilised people.

    • Hatshepsut gold member
      June 22
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      Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it! I did write it in a hurry last night, however I must confess that I have tweaked it a couple times since.

      As for why I'm not a journalist....I think it is considered unprofessional in the industry to sob like a baby when you're covering a story.

      I am really glad you liked it! You should download the video if you get the chance. It's hard to watch, though.

  • I know. It was so sad watching...so brutal. I think, though you wrote this in a hurry, you wrote it perfectly. History has taught us that the will of the people is stronger than any dictator. ANY. I am speechless by how you wrote this.

    • Hatshepsut gold member
      June 22
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      Wow...thank you!

      I was so overwhelmed as I watched the video, I felt compelled to write about it. Some of the footage i saw blurred her face, but another that I saw didn't. You could see her eyes roll back in her head, and the blood gushing. I was seriously bawling as I watched it.

      From all accounts, she had just been standing there, with her father. It was not a violent protest. I urge everyone, shocking as it is, to download the video and see the cold brutality in which this innocent woman was murdered. I truly pray that the people of Iran get the freedom they seek.

      Thanks again for your review!

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