A small, little kitten lost in the crowd,1
she meows and meows ,2
and nobody hears her Cries,3
her life ,a big boring book 4
she reads and reads slowly,5
feeling ants paralaysing her6
stealing happiness ,from her lonely eyes7
strangulating soul ,8
bit 9
by10
bit 11
then 12
comes love,13
Earthquake shakeing little cat14
a warm hand ,15
picks little kitten ,from the crowd16
giving her warm milk, and security,17
she feels18
a queen ,her kingdom19
azure sky ,20
she was a puppet in Muppet show 21
moving up and down 22
soulless,life lless23
a warm hand now24
combs her silk hair 25
she closes her eyes 26
dreaming of her prince 27
who is to her life28
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Very good
Wow, I really like the metaphors that you use. They are warm and fuzzy. I also enjoy the original way you choose to arrange the lines in a dramatic fashion.You might want to check spelling? -
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Sara, this is the THIRD attempt!
Software declared as Invalid and refused to display a direct reply to yours above. What a waste of time this is, when time is so short! I wanted to say, now that I have recovered, I will be here for a long time, but will need helpers for busy times.
If you see this, I hope you will read the revised version. It is important.
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thanks Sara sorry for late reply
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ahhhh
excellent work here.
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Good expression and meaning.
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Hi my Egyptian friend. Great poem here, reminded me of getting my dog. Great write.
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Yay for the kitty!
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thanks nell ,trayseelynn ,cope i hope now you have changed your mind about walking like chicken lol
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very wonderfully done excellent form
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This is a great story. nice work.
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oh this is a nice story
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love somes suddenly to change your whole life
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