Amberlee stood quietly looking out the window.1
She reached out toward the real world, but still it escaped her. Protected by glass. She watched the cars and the people passing by. She watched the birds and everything growing in her mother’s garden.2
She tried the door. Still locked.3
Amberlee stood quietly looking out the window.4
What did you think? Please comment!
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Yeah- that was my one goal. I didn't know what I was going to write about when I started, but I knew that I wanted the first and the last line to be the same.
It probably took much longer than it should ahve to come up with the line 
-Ceilinh -
Ooooooh, really intriguing piece! Yes, you too left your piece open to interpretation as well. I can see several different cases for this piece as well. I really love how you started and ended off the piece with that one line, it works really well!
Great job on this! You certainly made the best of those 55 words!
~lavender shadows~
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Thanks- with a story this short, I didn't think there was going to be any way for me to spell everything out.
So I didn't.
I like a little ambiguity in my stories anyway. It's about whatever you want it to be about 
-Ceilinh -
exactly 55 words
this is so sad and haunting. Part of me when I read this made me think of the ghost of a girl trapped forever in a room. The line "real world" is what gave me that impression.
I can also see this as a girl imprisoned, maybe by a parent or something like an illness that keeps her confined.
This works on several levels for me.
Thank you and good luck
Susan
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