We used to be friends (poem)


If I could have a wish come true,1

I know what I'd wish.2

I'd wish for the chance to go back in time,3

For the chance to prevent myself from losing you.4

I'd make sure not to make the same mistakes,5

I'd be sure to do things better.6

All the times we'd gone through once before,7

Would no longer be forsaken.8

I'd make everyday better than I had made it before,9

I'd do things differently, 10

That's for sure.11

I would cherish everyday I was friends with you,12

I'd hold on tight to what we had,13

I'd never let it slip away.14

I'd show you how much you mean to me,15

I'd make you feel like you belong.16

As I sit here now,17

I wish I would have done things right the first time,18

I wish I wouldn't have made so many mistakes,19

I wish I wouldn't have taken you for granted,20

But most of all,21

I wish that we were still friends,22

Like we used to be. 23

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  • Le Masquerade silver member
    July 14

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    oh...very sad...This poem is awesome and it really shows true emotion. Thanx for entering and good luck

  • lalala69
    July 6

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    That was very good. I felt like sometimes the rhythm of the poem went off a little bit, but it is still good. Also, I didn't see what I am looking for in your author's notes, but just make sure that you get that info to me and you will be set for final judging! Thank you for entering!


  • Unice the geek
    July 6

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    very VERY good. you made me super happy. thamk you for your entery, i hope to see more of youre work very soon! GREAT JOB!

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Clary--Selene--Tayy gold member
    July 3

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    hey thur caity haha lol loved it as i already said

  • frostany
    June 22

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    I loved the way the plain and simple language you used in this piece told a story that pulled at my heart strings and reached out to a place that every reader has been at some point or other in their lives.

    Oh wouldn't it be so much simpler if life came with a rewind button and we could learn from our mistakes and go back and do things all over again. I also have some friends that I've messed up with and some friends that have drifted away over the years and sometimes I miss them so much that I ache inside. I like how you were very broad and nonspecific in your poem and made it so we don't know the exact details of what happened between you and your friend it makes it so the poem can apply to so many different readers that have been in your shoes.


  • Raining.Fire
    June 20

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    WOW!!!!! That was amazing!!!!! So sad! I really felt the emotion. Very well written, and creative. Bravo!!!!!!!!!!!!!


  • Clary--Selene--Tayy gold member
    June 19
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    Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhh

    got it now...awww poor caitynator, who is it about???


  • WindSongNauck
    June 19

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    Wind Song Review

    Hello...This was so sad...

    My thoughts are we all live on the roads of life that are set path ways with many places to rest, We all need to in those times of rest take time look back the way we came we can see how we walked around up an over from studing the foot prints..and good rest will show us what not to do again...to learn is to reflect....


    Gods Blessings be with you

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Y2Jay
    June 19
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    this is beautifull. i loved it.


  • Much-Dipstick
    June 19

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    Aw... beautiful. I've done this too... but fortunately I was able to put things right, and it's been hard, but we're getting there . I hope you feel better soon and things improve

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