Leaves of Autumn - a poem for my daughter

Newborn one, you come to me, 1

like a mysterious ripple, 2

that breaks the smooth surface of a peaceful 3

pond. 4

Like a sudden rainstorm, 5

crashing with thunder and blinding with lightning; 6

not even a single drop before to herald the 7

coming onslaught. 8

Your cherubs' face attacks my banded heart 9

with a ferocity it was not made to bear. 10

Defence from such an assault is 11

laughable 12

loving you the only choice available. 13

Like the leaves of autumn, so has my heart 14

changed it's colors and fallen 15

A contest entry

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  • Lady Eventide Greeters member
    June 19

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    like a mysterious ripple,
    that breaks the smooth surface of a peaceful
    pond

    Oh, gosh. That was beautiful!!!

    I hope you don't mind me saying this, but I am going to become a stalker of sorts. I think you're a very talented author of prose and poetry.

    This was beautiful. Made me cry. I wish you all the best in the contest. You will definitely go far.


    • colinlinder
      June 19

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      lol feel free to stalk away. I've never had my own personal stalker; it just might be fun
      Seriously though, thank you for the comments, it's much appreciated.

  • SilentMoonDance
    June 19

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    Nice...

    This was an amazing poem, advertising such intense love for someone--a daughter--that leaves you a changed, self-sacrificing person.
    Great job, good luck!


  • MJs-Angel
    June 18

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    Awww! That's so sweet of you to dedicate a poem to your daughter! Especially an awesome one like this one! Great job and good luck in the contest!

    -Angel


  • The Tmnts Sister
    June 18
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    Aw, so sweet. Nice choice of words too. Also, you discription was amazing!

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