Oh Those Little Girls

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Both toddlers touched the pocket of their napping father's t-shirt asking, "Is that your pocket daddy?". He replied, "Yes". Again they asked,"Is that your pocket daddy?". He replied, "Yes it is". Yet again they asked, "Is that your pocket daddy?". Frustrated, he ripped off the pocket, handed it to them replying, "No, it's YOURS". After only a moment's blank stare, they handed the pocket back to their daddy and asked, "Is this your pocket daddy??"   2

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True story. You kind of had to be there.  My twin daughters were 3 years old at the time.  This short story is no longer only 55 words. I edited it after the contest to include the punchline, which I didn't have room for before.

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  • I will stand by you
    January 26, 2007
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    so sweet.

  • Lyrical Soul
    August 13, 2005
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    Thank you Susan. I decided not to edit it, by the way.


  • SusanL
    August 13, 2005
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    I babysat triples when I was a teenager and though they never caught me napping I did get frustrated more than once with the why? why? why?
    this was cute and humorous. You gave us an entire snapshot in this short space, well done.
    Thank you and good luck
    Susan

  • Ceilinh
    August 13, 2005
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    OMG! That's hilarious!!!

  • Lyrical Soul
    August 12, 2005
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    Thanks Sam.

  • Samplette
    August 12, 2005
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    lol, from the mouths of babes...very funny lady..even got a chuckle out of me. Best wishes in the contest.
    Sam

  • I M me
    August 11, 2005
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    That was funny.

  • Lyrical Soul
    August 10, 2005
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    Thank you Jps. It is a memory I'll cherish and giggle about til my dying day.

  • Just4u
    August 9, 2005
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    lol...I didn't have to be there as I was in a similar incident. This took me back many years...thanks for the memories...

    Hugs...Eddy


  • Medea
    August 9, 2005
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    lmao. Ripped his pocket off? The joy of little kids... Great write.

  • Itsalie
    August 9, 2005
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    Very funny. I quite enjoyed the tale and the method it was written, all very real.

    thanks,
    Talia


  • leander
    August 9, 2005
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  • Lyrical Soul
    August 9, 2005
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    LOL, well if I had more words I could use when I wrote this, the punchline of it all was that after he handed them the pocket, they handed it back to him and said "Is this your pocket daddy?"

  • leander
    August 9, 2005
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    ROFLOL well, I wish I was there while daddy was ripping off that pocket, to hand it over to them I wonder how they were looking at him with confusion in their eyes

    Best wishes to you!

    Leander

  • leo2
    August 9, 2005
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    Kids say and do the darnedest things and can be so persistant.
    I like the simplicity of this adorable story.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


  • fathom me
    August 9, 2005
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    *laugh* Wow! That was really a good one.. cheeky
    Edited on Aug 09, 2:49 because ''.

  • Papillon1
    August 9, 2005
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    YOu know they really wanted that pocket.. girls know where daddies keep the money! Adorable read

  • macandrew
    August 9, 2005
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    very good

    Pleazzzze, pleazzzze, Pleazzzze,Pleazzzze, Pleazzzze,Pleazzzze, Pleazzzze,Pleazzzze,Pleazzzze, Pleazzzze, Pleazzzze, Pleazzzze,

    until I can't remember what she asked in the first place. 2 1/2.

    Very well written.
    John

  • Lyrical Soul
    August 8, 2005
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    Thank you hon. It's a true story and much funnier when I can use more words to tell it Love you too sweety!

  • suseann
    August 8, 2005
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    We would tear out our pockets to give them our hearts if they wanted it.Or did utter frustration lead to such rash behavior!
    Fantasticly funny story you've penned.~~~~~Suseann


  • Leslie gold member
    August 8, 2005
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    LMAO I love the idea, and it-s so short and yet made my day I hadn't smile today but now I had, well the frustration I have heard the parents can have with their children is amazing , I mean certainly my mom frustrates with me when I'm annoying, anyways I loved the concept, and very simple and yet well pulled off... I have been missing you, love you

    Leslie

  • devils desire
    August 8, 2005
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    haha this is reli funny nice work keep it up!reli good! x

  • cherche -d -ame
    August 8, 2005
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    you did such a great job with this so short but ever so sweet story (I was there and I witnessed it) Thanks for the smile , best wishes in the contest ......and I will talk to you when I get back (10:05am Dep time tomorrow)Byeeeeeeez and mou@@@@@@@z
    Reenie

  • SusanL
    August 8, 2005
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    Exactly 55 words.
    Clever story.
    I will be back to make a more thorough comment after the contest closes, just wanted to let you know - read and counted.
    Thank you and good luck.
    Susan

  • Touchof1der
    August 8, 2005
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    I really like this. I can just picture the children romping and playing here as "daddy dearest" tries his darndest to catch some z's. The imagery is great! Good luck in the contest.
    ♥ Kimberly

  • MagicLady
    August 7, 2005
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    Ahhh, very dear to my heart, this poem. Many of us sleep deprieved parents know how children can ask the same things over and over. This was very sweet, I liked it very much.

    Cheryl Cheers!!!

  • Lyrical Soul
    August 7, 2005
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    Thank you Margaret I'll fix the apostrophe now. That was the funniest thing. I wish I had filmed that moment in time.


  • MargaretG
    August 7, 2005
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    Lyrical, this is the sweetest ever! Oh how I know the persistence of young children and the impatience of a nap-needy parent!! In line 1, fathers needs an apostrophe.
    Wonderful job!

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