I knew her when I saw her1
"you have stomach cancer" Dr. Kimbro explained as he showed me the x-rays2
"I'm terribly sorry but it is inoperable. With medication, you might have four to six months to live, but at this advanced stage, chemothatapy would not help. If you would like, I can arrange for someone to inform your family, and help out with any legal details."3
With those words, Dr.Kimbro prepares me for death4
days go by5
I'm eating more pills than food now. the pain in my stomach a constant reminder of the death sentance I am under. My wife tries to be brave, but her smeared makeup betrays the sorrow she tries so desperately to hide from me.6
months go by7
I am weak. Most days I am unable to get out of bed unassisted. My wife works hard to keep me comfortable, brave soul that she is. I try not to show her how much pain I am in. I want to die with dignity.8
hours go by9
Then I see her. she does not enter through the door, but stands there, like she had been there the whole time, waiting. I knew her the moment I saw her.10
She is Michelle, my childhood friend, who took her own life when her marriage failed.11
She is Rhonda, who drowned after having a siezure in a bathtub.12
She is Steven, killed in a car accident.13
She is my grandmother, who died of old age.14
she is everyone I knew who passed before me.15
She is Death. She has come for me.16
I am not afraid. she is more comforting than anything right now.17
She is not the Skeleton in a black cloak I had expected, but a gentle soul, taking me to my friends and family. taking me home.18
The pain subsides in my worn-out body, leaving only a calm numbness, as if falling asleep. With my last breath, I whisper my love to my wife, and tell her that I will be waiting.19
I am ready.20
I take her hand.21
What did you think? Please comment!
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part of life
could use more details but i love how you did the 'she is so and so' and so many people thats very interesting, original. take away the skeletons!! death must be beautifull!!
anna
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Wow, amazing! Wonderful write, I really enjoyed reading it. I love the way you described death, instead of being a skeleton in a black cloak with a scythe you portrayed it as every one you knew who had passed before you. Very unique and interesting.
Thanks for entering my contest!
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A very imaginetive and well written piece. It's sad, but serene and accepting, perhaps as death should be, will be.
I'm glad this isn't true for you, that you apparently plan on living awhile
Good luck in the contest
Dee
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just my imagination, really. perhaps this is how i hope death will come when it comes for me.
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Hopeful and Pure!
And as you walked us through to your last breath I suddenly felt I no longer feared Death.Imagery is wonderul and the whole scene is not depressing as you get the chance to see all those that were dear to thee!May I ask if you have had a near death experience or is just your wonderfully rich imagination? -
oh my.. this is brilliant, it made me cry though...reminded me of my grandfather who died of stomach cancer. How hope death was gentle for him as well.
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ohhh excellent write very well done . those who love us on the other side come for us and we never die alone
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Not sure if some typos are suppose to be there. Why some sentences have no capitals, i not capital etc. Interesting reading - like the ending. relates back to the beginning, from beginning to end - well done.
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The is an adventurous piece and even courageous. I like the idea which comes out for me through the title. I like this, it is a beautiful write with a lot of sensitivity, if only we could plan how we would react in such situations if god forbid we have to meet them face to face
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This is beautifully sad. I love the time line you presented; days go by, hours go by, months go by. It really added to the poem. Great poem and Write on, my brother!!
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This sounds so much like my poem "the conversation" about my conversation with death last year. You have a very eerie and dark write; it's ashame that death is always hovering, which is what I said in my poem.
Nice write.
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An emptyness is shared
It is really highly imaginative work to concieve the last journey of life and seems to be very true too. The crescendo of thoughts makes this journey very practical in terms of its possibilities. The thoughts are really mystical and sprirtual too and bringing the light of the other world..other world which is entirely different from this materialistic world too. The flow of the write is very impressive and communicative too.I really apreciate this work.prabhudayal khattar
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