Oak Tree

Tall, wise, old oak tree,1

if only you could speak to me.2

With ears and eyes upon thy bark,3

cradling stories within thine arc.4

With bark like eyes,5

with bark that seeks,6

your leaves reach down to kiss my cheeks.7

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But alas, dear oak,9

you've never spoke,10

and for that I shall pout.11

For you've no lips upon thy tips12

of leaves to help you shout,13

nor have you tounge or faithful lung14

to let you breath tales out.

Author notes

This poem, followed by several others, I wrote for a character in one of my books to write. But that book won't be typed or posted for a very long time, so I thought I'd post it. the character's name is Nayan. I hope you liked it.

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  • rinzu
    2 days ago
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    entered in my last contest so deleting this entry

  • rustic
    November 16
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    Flows very nice,

    the voice is natural-ish and I like the concept itself


  • rinzu
    October 28

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    good usage of rhymes and i felt a rich character description being churned out here...

    good luck


  • Everpurple
    July 31

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    Ah, the days of poetry! I wish all poems could be this simple! And even for a story, I think it will fit in. THis was like a breath of fresh air on my smoke shrouded days. Thank you!


  • Le Masquerade silver member
    July 14

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    I loved this poem!!! Great use of words and description welcome to the finalist list!


  • Lady Eventide Greeters member
    July 13

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    I really did like this, and I hope you tell me when you post the story you wrote this poem for.

    I don't write poetry as often as I used to, but I must say that I really enjoyed this. It was a moving piece with a great rhyme scheme and the imagery is very wonderful too. Well done and thanks for entering!

    The only suggestion I have is with the word 'breath' because I think it should be 'breathes'.


  • YourPinUpDoll
    July 1
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    this was really goood!!! great job, keep it up!

    Silent

  • SilentMoonDance
    June 19

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    nice...

    I love the description, and the oak tree seems so beautiful and silent, yet living and creating a home for so many wildlife that inhabit its body.
    Great job, good luck!


  • MJs-Angel
    June 18
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    I love the idea in this poem. I would love to hear the wisdom and tales an old oak tree might be able to tell me.

    I loved your descriptions. This poem truly deserves some award! It's short...yet it allows the author to interpret whatever he/she would like.

    Great job.

    -Lydia May (Angel)


  • Girl Anachronism
    June 15
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    Oops. I almost forgot your well-deserved applause. Here you go.

  • Girl Anachronism
    June 15

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    I adore your poetry style. It's so natural in a very elegant, knowledgable (sp?) kind of way. It's just so beautiful.


  • Melissa Loves Jeffy
    June 12

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    I think this is one of your best works when it comes to poetry so far. It reminds me of when I went to my tree in my backyard when I was sad. It never spoke but it was always there for me


  • comicgirl93
    June 12

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    this has 2 b 1 of my fav poems. i luv how u use old english in ur poems, 2 me it makes evrythin sound twice as pretty.

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