Apologies

The hem of her skirt brushed along the top of her shoes; its momentum kept it swinging despite her sudden stop.1

She didn't look surprised to see me.  But she rarely looked surprised, I reminded myself.  That was only because her thoughts moved so quickly.  She could comprehend entire, muddled situations in an instant.  Probably she was remembering quiet footsteps when we walked in the forest, and the key I had not yet returned, and surely she remembered my last, angry words.  Probably, she paired these memories with the smell of the roses I held behind my back, with the shadows under my eyes, and with the words half-formed on my lips.  2

She could catch up with the present so quickly, sometimes it seemed she tripped a little ways into the future.  3

I had opened my mouth to speak-- but panicked.  What reason did she have to take me back?  How would I ever find another woman who understood me as well as she did? What if--4

"I'm sorry, too," she said, before I could apologize.5

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I hoped for this to be a short glimpse that says a lot about two people, and tells something of their story.  Let me know whether it's all comprehensible.

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  • meejin
    August 23, 2005
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    This is sweet. You portrayed very nicely how two people can be so close, but through just one scene which told their past, too. Thanks for the comment, and you seem like a writer worth reading! So expect more comments from me.

    Allison

  • Reb153
    August 9, 2005
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    great job

    You did an amazing job on this story. It was so cute. Keep up the great work.
    `Becca~

  • Average Joe
    August 6, 2005
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    i think you have done a fabulous job here. You have given us a snapshot, a moment in time and painted it so clearly. you have given us character development. an intro and a conclussion in a very tightly woven vignette.
    I ahve not seen many good stories here so far, but this one has that something more that makes it worth the time it takes to read, and worth wading through the mediocrity to find it.


  • Bride Of Hate
    August 5, 2005
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    Awww. This is so cute! I love the way you made so much about a couple's past so known without even telling it!! how did you do that ?!?!?! lol, anyhow. Keep it up! i love this!
    One love,
    Kitty xxx