There are things we talk about and things we don't
Yet more often then not I find myself losing hope.
This is confusing me, I don't understand
I can't seem to find a safe place to land.1
How much do you know, how much can you see?
Have you even noticed that there are two parts to me?
If I am nothing more than a rag on the floor,
Hold on, I'll show you to the damn door.2
But if I'm not, if I'm more than a tool,
I will wallow in regret, I've been a fool.
All I wanted was an occasional ear,
For someone to listen and actually hear.3
For arms to hold me, a voice to calm me,
Eyes to see me, and a scent to taunt me.
I am not a toy, not one easily pushed around.
Yet I will relinquish my firm hold to find fair ground.4
There are things to be said,
But as I delve further into me head,
I wonder if they will be heard
Or will they come off as just words?
Author notes
So... I wrote this awhile back... hopefully it fits the contest rules...
A contest entry
- Expressive Poetry by Keirii.
350 points, ended June 18, 34 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Emotional. Made me think of how I feel every now and then. Great poem.
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Everyone wants someone to listen. Just words was sweet. Fourth paragraph was best. Indeed there are words and just words. Which is which? Nicely written.
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This is very good Very, very good!!!
Hahaha... I could picture the person and the expression on his/her face. Very deep and very intense.
You most definatly have a way with words!!!
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Thanks! I've never really been the best at writing poetry but I tried it and it seems it was a sucess. Yay, happy dance. Thanks for the reassurance, now I think I'll start writing more of it.
<3 H.P.
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I really realy enjoyed reading "Just Words".One thing that truely attracts me to a piece of writng is if im drawn into it and blocked off by all other distractions, and i was.
I liked your choice of words and it definently sent a message i can relate to.
"All I wanted was an occasional ear,
For someone to listen and actually hear.3
For arms to hold me, a voice to calm me,
Eyes to see me, and a scent to taunt me.
I am not a toy, not one easily pushed around.
Yet I will relinquish my firm hold to find fair ground" . . . LOL i know its long but this whole section here really made me want to read more if there was more to read (LOL) i can relate to this because i get that feeling alot and for me, all i can do is try 2 make the best out of what i have.
But yea . . . it was great!!!
beginning: 3, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 1, characters: 1.
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Thanks! I was afraid it was too over the top or just bad, thanks for helping rid me of those beliefs.
I actually wrote this when I was really frustrated at someone in my life at the time. There seemed to be no other way to write it so I'm glad it was as strong of a piece as the emotions I was feeling were.
Again, thanks for the comment!
<3 H.P.
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