You were my mario

You were my mario1

I was your princess peach2

we always wished we could be on koopa beach3

you were strong I went along4

and I always sang you a song5

I wished you would come back and rescue me6

but now its too late you see7

Bowser has got me 8

locked in a castle9

held captive10

a slave 11

but I know Mario, your brave 12

I wish to be free13

why cant you rescue me 14

if you could only see 15

I just want to be me16

Mario attempts to rescue princess17

*sorry but princess is in another castle

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  • faithundefined
    June 10

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    Interesting

    I love that idea that you used. It was sweet and different. everything seemed to flow well together. It was really a wonderful poem

    Great work, keep writing
    Summer

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • DogsLookUp silver member
    June 10

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    Awww, that was so sugar-coated and adorable
    I loved the concept of you being Princess Peach held captive in another castle, the one Mario didn't reach. There are a few spelling errors but I'm sure you'll fix those. Cute little poem, Shayla! Nice job.


  • Secret.Admirer
    June 10

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    Cute. I little all over the place but I like the idea. It made me smile, thanks brighting up my day!!!