Love


"It's a simple word, isn't it?" Jeremy said to Kamela as they walked down the concrete path. Camela looked at him and tilted her head, confused. 1

"Um...What word?" She asked. Jeremy looked down at her and smiled. He forgot that he didn't say it first. Jeremy did that alot. He would often think of something and ask someone about it without saying the direct word or subject.2

"Oh, sorry." He apologized to her, "I was thinking about the word 'love'."3

Kamela heart jumped a beat when he said that word. She wasn't sure but she didn't think Jeremy knew that she had feelings for him. 4

Kamela always had liked Jeremy, ever since they met in fifth grade. They became friends in middle school and later best friends in the beginning of high school. Kamela never had a boyfriend during her teen years in high school. Jeremy, however, had several different girlfriends through out the years. 5

"Why is it a funny word?" Kamela asked. 6

Jeremy shook his head, "I didn't say funny. I said it is a simply word." 7

Kamel looked down at the pavement and said in a quiet voice, "Oh." 8

"Its ok." Jeremy replied, lifting her chin to look at him. "Kamela, what do you think love is?"9

Kamela felt herself get shaky as Jeremy touched her chin. "I...Uh...." She stuttered. Just tell him, Kam! You'll never know what he thinks unless you just tell him! Her mind screamed at her. 10

"I...I think love means..." Kamela was having trouble speaking. Jeremy's auburn eyes were focused on her magnificent green. His curly hair was tied back in a pony tail and his dark skin was smooth looking. Kamela's red hair was cut short ina pixie style. She came up to Jeremy's chin but was still tall.11

Damn it!! Kamela, you idiot! Just say those simple little words!12

"I think love means us." Kamela finally managed to say. 13

Jeremy gave her a confused look, "What?" He asked. 14

"Jeremy, I'm in love with you." Kamela breathed. "I've been in love with you since the day we met." 15

Jeremy stared at Kamela with wide eyes as she spoke. Kamela was feeling more and more confident as she told him her true feelings. 16

She waited for his response but after a minute or so she began to worry. 17

"Jeremy?" Kamela asked, "I want to know if you feel the same way towards me?" 18

Jeremy just stood, staring at Kamela. She was now starting to worry alot. 19

Jeremy shook his head after another minute of time passing and closed his eyes. He stuck his hands in his pockets and sighed. 20

"Jeremy, do you feel the same way?" Kamela asked again. Jeremy opened his eyes. They were cold and harsh looking. He frowned and turned away from her and said in just a whisper.21

"No."

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Hi, Its Cranberry again!

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This is based on that song "Chasing Pavements" by Adele.

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  • music fever
    September 2
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    oh pleasw lc Do a part 2 !!!! i beg of u u have no idea idea how times i have read it!!!! pretty please.


  • Jennywinnie
    July 3

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    I love the internal monologue here...awesome!

    Though I don't know if she would come right and say that, plus I'm not convinced she's really in love with him. It sounds like infatuation to me. Explain to the reader why this is different than infatuation.

    Ahhhh, that's so sad! But awesome. I hate endings that are contrite and perfect. This is so true to life.

    Great job


  • Len Shadow
    July 1
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    That's sad and cruel. I was going to put "Aw! What a cute story!" but then I read the ending.

  • music fever
    June 10
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    hi CB
    Wow nice story what happens next??


    • Juniper Cran
      June 10
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      Hi BC
      Thank you.
      Well, that is it. I wanted it to have a simple flat out sad ending. Just a little short story based on a sort of dream I had when I was listening to 'Chasing Pavements' by Adele, on day.


  • Rorshach gold member
    June 9

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    Sad ending

    I was hoping he would smile, kiss her and say, 'Yes, of course yes.' I'm all sad now.
    I liked the story as it had a calmness about it.
    It was very short, but wasn't rushed in the slightest.
    If you could change the last word, I'd be very happy.

    • Juniper Cran
      June 9

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      Thank you, Rorshach. I ment for it to be sad. It was kind of a daymare (nightmare) I had a couple days ago while listening to that song.
      I was extremely tempted to make it happy, though.

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