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Lighting flashed outside, casting a shock of brilliant light into Kara's candle-lit room.  It had been pouring for three days straight.1

Kara yawned.  She was so incredibly bored that she hardly noticed the knock on the door.  She blinked at it for a while wondering who it could possibly be.  The person knocked again, but louder this time, bringing Kara back to Earth.  She got up quickly and opened the door.2

Standing in the doorway, drenched in rain, was someone she would never have expected.  He wore a black cloak, hood drawn.  This automatically made Kara suspicious, even though it was raining, so she stared at him in silence, untill the stranger finally spoke.3

"Are you Kara Davis?" he asked.  His voice was strange, making you want to trust it, but it also having such malice, such hate, it made you want to hate it.4

"Why?" She replied dryly.  There was a flash of lightning above his head.5

"My name is Gavin Andras," he said politely.  "Can I come in?  It's raining."6

"Don't remind me," Kara said, then sighed.  "Come in."  She stepped aside to allow him passage.  Gavin walked in and survayed the room.  Even in the candle-light, Kara could not see his face.7

"Is anyone else here?"  Gavin asked Kara mysteriously.8

"Why?"  Kara asked again, becomeing more and more suspicious.  9

Gavin laughed.  It was a wicked and cruel laugh, making Kara want to hit him.  He waved his hand in the direction of the candles.  They blew out, causing Kara to stager in the darkness.  10

A bolt of lighting outside illuminated his blood-red eyes and wickedly pointed teeth.  He lunged at her, sinking his fangs into her neck-11

Gwin woke with a start.  It was the third night in a row that she had had a nightmare about this same vampire.  Gwin jumped at the sound of a knock at the door.  She quickly got up, lit a few candles and, suspecting the worst, walked to the door.  She cautiosly opened it and peered outside.12

When she saw a person in a black coat, just like in her nightmare, she shivered.13

"I'm Gavin Andras," he said in the same vioce as in her dream.  "Are you Gwin Bracey?"14

"Yes," Gwin replied calmly.  "Would you like to come in?"15

"Thank you," Gavin replied and stepped in.  Gwin only half knew what she was doing, and the half that didn't know was shaking in fear.16

As soon as Gavin stepped in, he slammed the door and waved his hand blowing out the candles.  Even before her eyes adjusted, Gwin groped for a broom that leaned on the wall.  She found it just as Gavin lunged at her.   17

But Gwin was prepared for this.  She swung the broom, hitting the vampire in the face.  She quickly ran out the door and all the way to the to Arrow's Point.  Arrow's Point was an over-hang cliff that hung dangerously over the ocean's crashing waves.18

She turned as she heard angry footsteps behind her.  She was at a dead end, with only a slim chance of surviving.  19

Gwin turned toward the ocean and the crashing waves and took the chance.  She dived into the icy water.  The tumbling sea took her helpless ly over to the cliff.  Swirling water engulfed her, pressing against her, and slowly, she felt herself slip away into cold unconsiouness.20

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  • Misfortune
    August 31, 2007
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    Ally, you have to write more! You're killing us all here!!


  • frayed-hope
    September 22, 2005
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    great

    Bad ally ally ally you know better you should have more fonny things i mean its really great but it sooo does not match your persinalty

  • The Take Over
    September 16, 2005
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    WRITE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    WRITE MORE OR ELSE I'LL HUNT YOU DOWN(even though i already know where you live,which makes it easier)AND TIE YOU TO A CHAIR WHILE WATCHING THE TELLATUBBIES UNTIL YOU GO CRAZY!!!!!

  • The Take Over
    August 9, 2005
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    Wonderful!!!!!!!!!

    THIS IS SOOOOOOO NOT BAD!!!!! You have no idea how wonderful your work is! You are going to end up being published,I swear.You are so awesome!