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Two families so different but so the same1

Between these families came feud, hate and fame.2

Their love for money and greed take over their hearts3

And old hates continue and new ones start4

an overload of power takes its form5

Two children in these families were soon born6

And from their start they are told to hate7

to fight to shoot to have a debate8

to grow up and vindicate there side9

And fill their family with everlasting pride10

These children grew up into beautiful teens11

Knew the hate, and knew their needs12

When the feud had calmed , on a winter noon.13

Between the sun set and between the rise of the moon.14

These teens met and soon grew in lust.15

They only knew that it's a must.16

They didn't bother or matter to ask each others names.17

And then fell in love and fell in games.18

Time past and no one knew .19

Rumors were unleashed , but no one believed it was true.20

'Love from those two families how did work it out?'21

They're only teenager's so they skipped that doubt.22

The girl walked through her door 23

not wishing for anything more24

then her brother's hit her, not soft but hard25

Crushing her soul like a fragile peice of card26

What are you doing with that man?27

Don't you understand our killing plan?28

The girl froze when she noticed that love is not what she thought.29

But for its sake she insisted and fought.30

Down the road the boy walked in pride.31

When his cousin and brothers offered to give him a ride.32

He accepted and entered, he thought it would be fun.33

Then he felt on his forehead the cold press of a gun.34

'What are you doing with that vandal?35

'The whole town knows your huge scandal'36

Leave her now, or you'll be dead.37

To restore our pride cover her in red.38

What they are talking about is awfully true.39

From love they have learned something terribly new.40

How could they make this mistake?41

Now their love must be shown as fake.42

They are a disgrace they must be dead. k43

Each side wants to blow off their head..44

But their love is so pure and strong.45

They will now run away together and not return for long.46

In that town their love was impossible.47

But far away it is possible.48

they now live by a lake in a temple of love.49

and forever them and their love is protected from the angels above.50

Hidden they forever will remain. 51

For the next feud they will take the blame. 52

Two family's reputations ruined by their children's love story.53

Their standards dropped, because there is no such thing as endless glory

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  • lavanya
    September 17

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    intresting poem , kind of hidden story . perfect wording and love the flow but as host said little bit grammer problems but hey i m also not master in it so..keep up the good work.


  • ForestFaery
    September 13

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    lines 1 through twelve lacked the correct end punctuations but otherwise very very good. I really enjoyed it.

  • nice...

    this reminds me of Romeo & Juliet. I really do like the way you've constructed this, the rhyme scheme and everything.
    Grear job and good luck!


  • MJs-Angel
    June 12

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    I think you captured the whole story in just a poem EXTREMELY well. There was nothing wrong with it, grammer and spelling wise. I think the last two lines really took me away. Good luck in your contest!

    -Angel