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Propped up in bed she looked down at her deformed feet. 2
Forty years in toe shoes had taken their toll, the satin slippers she now wore made her smile and hid the worst. 3
At fifty three she was aged beyond her years.4
So tired, she drifted off and back to the opening scene of Giselle.5
Author notes
not so funny but these things are really addictive.
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Great!
Nice little piece! I see somebody called it a vignette. That's a neat word. I must look it up and study what it is all about. A short, short story, I suppose. I once knew an artist that painted "vignettes". Live and learn. I'm 63 years old, but I learn new lessons every day about law and life and love and Latin and literature and ladies and ... oh, well!... that's about all the "L's" I can think of without thinking. Keep a-writin'! Sincerely, Hardy Parkerson -
Hi! Nice way of creating an image for the reader.
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Again I read way to much.. Thinking about a book here the Sisterhood of the Rose.. By chance is this about that? If so I am gonna fall out this chair.. twilight zone music I have been a avid reader since I was a child you see. Speed reader no less.. it's a gift and a hazard because I finish books too fast and never want them to end.. Many Blessings.. Catressa
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great..
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Exactly 55 words.
I feel that everything in here can be taken to illustrate the Hollywood type of today, where 53 is retirement age and an ‘ugly’ time for a human being. The deformed feet are what is her ‘natural’ beauty. The satin slippers are the pictures and movies of times past, times for her to reflect upon, and this is added to with the last sentence. Beautiful.
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you paint a special picture of a well worn woman who's art is only a dream. How many must feel that way.
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very good
This had me thinking of foot binding, an old practice in the far east. Very sad and an odd custom that created many cripples.
Very well written for so few words.
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Dang Susan. I read this before but I DIDNT GET IT. Now I do. Glad I came back I KNEW it wasn't sinking in. Well done. How very true. Good luck for the contest- these are hard to write you did so quite well
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Susan, you show the suffering that people will bear to create art, the dancers' feet and the musicians' hands, especially.
What a perfect vignette this is.
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