I sit silently watching the silvery reflection of a new day being born on the wall outside my window. There is a great deal in my past not worth remembering but somehow still worth crying over. My heart stirs at the eco of a memory. A beautiful face close to mine at sunset. As I try to explain to a friend how one can love and hate the same man all at once I realize that I miss you. Even as he lies silently sleeping in my bed; I miss you. How is it that my eyes still threaten to leak my secrets into the sea when you are mentioned? 1
How could I ever hate you? My beautiful, gorgeous love. How could I ever love you, you cruel adulterer? No one ever saw me cry. How could I let them? They all needed me to be strong. They all assumed that you, my vowed love were behind me in emotion as you were in law. You were perfectly happy to kill for me, so why then couldn’t you live for me. 2
It was like an addiction for you; a new one every time I turned around. I swear that you couldn’t have seen them as people. Not even animals, because you treated animals with more respect. Was it because their lives were so short, like mayflies –alive for but a day—that you felt no remorse your actions? 3
Or was it that you truly loved me but couldn’t get close enough to me to say it, despite our ties? You grew so jelous of the power that ran just beneath my skin, I could see your determination to be as strong as I, but alas, when I tried to help you gain magic of your own it only scorched your veins and boiled your blood. 4
Was it only occasional lust that brought you to me? Craving release from the desire that bound you to me more than emotion ever did. 5
Love, I have so many questions. But none of them can be answered now. So sleep in peace, and let me have my new life, new love. Stop troubling me with memories that deceive my soul. 6
Author notes
this story is from the perspective of my charactor Ishtar, you can read more about her in my "Ishtar's Diary" story.
A contest entry
- Short-short Story Contest! Any genre welcome! by amanda vampiress.
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It's really beautiful. I could feel her confusion like she was being dragged between good and bad memories, asking herself why she couldn't let it go and move on, and yet she also had. The confusion that fills all of our heads when we love someone so deeply and yet it doesn't work out - we move on - but still part of us longs for the person before. I thought you used the words very well, creating a strong picture for the reader. I will definitely have to check out the full version of your story now, I'd like to read more. Also, I liked the subtle twist that left me wondering if he had killed someone and then himself... Really good write, thanks for entering my contest and good luck
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It's very poetically written and very eloquent. The confusion and conflict in this story is very apparent; I think this is my favorite of the contest entries. Good luck in the contest!
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This was really well written. I enjoyed reading this. I thought that you did a good job of capturing the mood and portraying your characters emotions. I think that many people; anyone who has lost a love, could relate to this. Great job! Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!
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That's bloody brilliant. I haven't read Ishtar's Diary, but I think I should check it out now. This was really good.
Thanks for entering.
-Nate
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Cool
I haven't read the full story, will do that later. However the starter is really catchy. You know the way you described the sunrise and every thing.
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