I Need Ur Advise Please

The rain was ponding heavily against the windscreen, wippers working over time trying to make the road visible. The air conditioning on high, hot air billowing out in order to stop the windscreen from steaming up. 1

The head lights on full, fighting off the darkness from the night. 2

The streets outside desserted and barren exculding the occational piece of litter being flung around by the wind.3

Inside the old rusting mustard colour station wagon, there was silence. Not a word being spoken by driver nor passengers. A young childin sitting in the back seat, tears streaming down her horrified face issued no sound from her lips. She wouldn't dare make a noise with her step-father was in this kind of mood.4

The Mother in the front passengers seat was staring blankly out of the rain streaked window hunched up in her seat.5

The driver, a tall musculine man, was leaaning back lazily in his seat, a smirk spread across his greasy, pimple coverd face.6

ok before i go any further do you think this is a good start for a short story. Is it worth carrying on with?7

please let me now what you think. im open to any ideas and criticism. oh and by the way yes i an aware i probably have awful spelling and grammer. sorry about that. 8

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