Mommy and daddy put a pretty red blanket on the ground near a pond. Lilly played with the blanket as it fell near her. She watched daddy unpack the basket. He had round plates and square napkins. Then Lilly saw a frog near the water.1
The big frog croaked loudly as little Lilly crawled closer. She reached a little finger towards him and he jumped off his pad hiding in the weeds. She giggled happily as if this new animal was the silliest thing in the world.2
Daddy pounced after the frog splashing mud everywhere! Oh no, Lilly, look out! Lilly got very dirty, but mommy helped clean her up. Daddy brought the frog over and she clapped with joy! 3
Mr. Cat came over to sniff the frog. Wow! The frog jumped high out of daddy's hands. Look at Mr. Cat chase the frog. Mr. Cat was very fast, and he almost caught the frog. Quick, frog quick, jump onto your pad! Bounce from pad to pad.4
Ah, poor Mr. Cat fell in the water, and now he was all wet. Silly Mr. Cat's wet fur made him look very skinny. Mr. Cat shook himself very hard getting water all over daddy. Now daddy was all wet. Mommy and Lilly laughed very hard at him. 5
Fluffy, the dog, also thought Mr. Cat looked funny still wet but now fluffy too. Mr. Cat didn't like Fluffy laughing at him and hissed. Fluffy barked and pranced while Mr. Cat licked his paws. Fluffy barked loud scaring Mr. Cat! Mr. Cat ran and Fluffy chased him. Round and round a tree, run fast Mr. Cat!6
Daddy took the potato salad out of the basket. When he stood, Mr. Cat ran fast under his legs. Uh oh! Here comes Fluffy! Hold on daddy! Mommy reached for the salad, but too late. Fluffy bounced off daddy's legs and the salad fell out of his hands. Ewww... Now the salad spilled all over the blanket. Mr. Cat and Fluffy were very happy! They love potato salad.7
Fluffy and Mr. Cat ate the spilled potato salad. The frog wanted some too and jumped in front of Mr. Cat. Mr. Cat chased him and Fluffy followed. Round and round the pond they went. Lilly laughed and crawled fast trying to catch the frog. Daddy picked Lilly up and set her with mommy.8
Mommy gave Lilly a piece of banana. She ate the soft fruit happily. Mommy had and apple and daddy had some grapes. They watched the animals play by the pond. The happy family enjoyed their picnic together.
Author notes
Wish I could draw, I thought this would do well as a book with a sentence or two per page and an illustration. 
written for contest; Baby Shower by HowlofSerendipity
Hope you, hubby, and the new little girl like it.
for contest; childrens stories by Elvenfairy
I love Dr. Suess
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An engaging tale. I loved the bit a out the spilt potato salad - It might be fun if Daddy fell in the pond in the end. It's a bit too wordy in places... you do well with the action scenes.
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Hmm... was trying not to be wordy but that's ok, I'll see if I can tighten it up. I'm a wordy person though.
I like the idea of him falling into the pond, that made me laugh.
Thanks for the feedback.
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Ain't this the cutest!
I thoroughly enjoyed this. I felt like I was stepping into my childhood and really found myself giggling like a little girl throughout this story.
My only crit is that I would like to see the dialogue separated from the rest, but...it is a kid story, so...
Thanks for entering this in my contest and for making me feel young again.
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read this and realized that after I had read it to the last line and wow . I still loved it and it still had true meaning. It was neat cause its rare that I read things twice and this was great both times . You a very good children story writer. -
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It's really cute. I think it is a good childrens story, but then again I don't really know the guidelines for shildrens stories. I didn't see any spelling or grammer mistakes either
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Thanks
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this is really cute. i really enjoy reading tis
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so cute!!! gooood job
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Children would love it with an illustration of course,and it was well written.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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This was very nice and cute and innocent and yes i know its for children but it had true meaning.
It showed how fun it is to be a family and pets included and everything from the wild, and it makes a good picture of what we have happen to fall far away from , the great life we can have with simple things. Like a family picnic , wow , i am impressed and glad you put this together and its perfect for kids , and the child in me understood it. Thanks and keep writing this was well done.
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Thank you. It's too true, I fear we have fallen from having simple moments like this. Thank you and I hope others will see true value in family as well.
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this is really cute. :3 I'm sure Lilly will love it when she's old enough to truly understand the words.
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so happy you like it.
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there, thats much better, now I cam make you one of the finalists
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Please make sure you read the rules from now on ok? This was a nice story and I'd hate to have to disqualify you because you didn't follow the rules. So please go back and double check them for me, ok? Thanks for entering my contest.
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Sorry, I forgot as I was tired when I posted this. I always read the rules.
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