Heaven's 'Gates'

Upon entering Heaven, Bobby Gate’s angels had him list his earthly sins, so his soul would be free within Heaven’s realm. 1

However, after two days, Heaven’s angels ushered Bobby to his new office, tossing a black There's No Place Like 127.0.0.1 T-shirt at him. 2

Bobby learned that his mom was indeed wrong; crime does pay. 3

Author notes

127.0.0.1 is tech speak for HOME it's the home IP address. 'Gates' references Bill Gates of Microsoft fame  

Uh yeah. I know techies and how they are [rolls eyes]

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  • NeferMaatNetjer
    August 7, 2005
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    microsoft, microsoft, bloatware all the way
    I've been here installing word since breakfast yesterday
    microsoft, microsoft, moderation please!
    in case you havent noticed, 40 gig drives dont grow on trees

  • fae
    August 6, 2005
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    Thanks Jeanie! Still struggling to write fiction [crosses eyes] hey what about *%

  • jeanimoo
    August 6, 2005
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    Wow cool write and most creative

  • fae
    August 3, 2005
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    Earthly. I thought I wrote it that way. Took me all this time to figure it out. THANK YOU

  • fae
    August 2, 2005
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    Hey thanks! Oh I don't know this 55 worder was harder to write than a longer story- all that editing. I need practice. Much appreciate your comments. Honest feedback? Sure. better get your armour lol just kidding

  • raunak baral
    August 2, 2005
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    a really nice story...with beautiful imagery and nice vocabulary used...the background u used fits in well with your story too...nice work and shud i be to intruding to expect more of such amazing works from u in the future....keep in tuch.....it was a mesmerising story...keep writing... stay wel......
    ~rick~

    p.s. i hope u go thru some of my poems and give me some honest feedback about them i really need some honest comments...no flattery please...i'll be hopin to hear from u...............................................................tudlez ta ta ciao.....................................

  • Vickie J
    August 2, 2005
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    I didn't see the picture, but I did think this was funny. His efforts were worth a try and the little kick at the end about his mom not always being right was an extra boost to the write.~

  • fae
    August 1, 2005
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    Awww No matter 'cause I gotta get fictional practice Your new name is growing on me

  • Jay Is Magic
    August 1, 2005
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    I understood Gates, I'm an IT person. I just didn't know about home.

  • fae
    August 1, 2005
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    Took the picture off Susan- just liked the angels in heaven, not about internet at all And that tshirt means no place like home. That is an IP address that means HOME. It's my first 55 word contest so I don't know, it's just what came to me. Thank you for reading me

  • fae
    August 1, 2005
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    A joke is no fun when people done get it so sorry! It means HOME and i took the picture off cause i only liked it as a pic of angels with computers; but not about internet nope. Sorry!


  • SusanL
    August 1, 2005
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    so what I want to know is how yu got the IP for this heavenly office.
    I am not a techy so I think most of this sort of got past me. But the idea of someones heaven being an office, a black tshirt and internet access sort of unnerves me..
    Can you maybe give us a translation after the contest is over?
    Susan


  • MargaretG
    August 1, 2005
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    I'm of two minds whether "earthy" or "earthly" would apply, you choose.
    I'm obtuse today, what is 127.0.0.1?


  • piddlywinks
    July 31, 2005
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    LOL! Good grief, no internet in heaven? Well that's going to be hell Splendid piece! Thanks for the grins and good luck to you in the contest!

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