The moon shone softly onto the gloomy surrounding in which she sat, her soft blonde hair billowing in the wind behind her. The gravestone marker which served as her seat belonged to someone whom she had never known, and the hallowed ground beneath her feet was soft and wet from last night’s rain. Her soft green eyes wandered around her as she scanned the general area for possible dangers. 1
A soft rustle of leaves behind her cautioned her to the presence of company. She sat still and unmoving on her perch and continued to observe the quiet night. As the stranger approached close she turned on a dime, and now sat facing him. He was a tall, young man with piercing eyes that looked almost yellow in this light. His black unruly hair flowed behind him, as did his long leather jacket. He stood several feet in front of her looking into her eyes. 2
Her breathe was now coming a bit faster. She didn’t know what to expect from this handsome man that stood before her. Most would have attacked her by now, but he did not. He preferred to capture her soul with his gaze than to capture her through a fight. She rose slowly from the marker and approached him cautiously all the while never taking her eyes from his. She felt hypnotized by his deep eyes. 3
He stood before her, the perfect picture of grace and strength. As she came to stand only inches away from him he could hear her breathing. She however saw no signs of his breathe. It seemed to her as if he had no need for oxygen at all. 4
She stood wishing that she could stare into his eyes forever while hoping that he would speak to her, that he would reveal some part of himself. Instead of speaking aloud he leaned over and whispered in her ear. His deep voice was smooth and rich as the words escaped his lips. 5
“Would you like me to show you the night?” She could feel her chest tighten as he spoke to her, as his body was so close to hers. She wanted to tell him just how much she wanted him to, but could only slightly nod her head.6
He felt her movement and as he leaned away he took her hand in his and led her down the cemetery path. She followed without hesitation, although in her mind she felt that this may be a dangerous endeavor. Despite the logic she could not resist the temptation that this mysterious stranger had to offer. 7
She followed him for a while before he suddenly came to a stop in front of her. He turned gracefully on his heels and stood facing her. He looked down into her eyes as he took her other hand in his. After a moment of standing like this he ran his hands up her arms and to her neck. He slowly pulled her toward him as he leaned and pressed his lips to hers. His lips were soft but cold and the though the kiss felt amazing in the cool night breeze, it frightened her. 8
He pulled away from the kiss and looked into her eyes again, now his eyes actually looked yellow. It was no trick of the light. He leaned to her ear again and spoke much more softly than last time, although his voice was just as sultry. 9
“You have to want it.” She knew what he meant, but how could she stop herself. It was as if she was under some sort of spell. Again she slowly nodded. He didn’t look up at her, he just felt the motion of her hair against his skin. He leaned in and softly kissed her neck. She shuddered as she felt the pressure of his soft lips on her skin.10
He kissed her neck again a bit lower and then opened his mouth and ran his teeth along her neck. His teeth grazed her skin drawing blood and making her gasp. He chuckled a deep laugh, that resembled a growl as he bit deep into her soft skin. She tensed up and her hand reached into her pocket. She pulled out a sharp wooden stake and raised her hand between their bodies. She quickly thrust her wrist forward and sent the stake deep into his chest. His body disintegrated as he turned to dust before her eyes.11
Her eyes became less glazed as she realized that he was still leading her along the path, lightly tugging on her hand. Her gaze scanned him up an down. Suddenly he stopped in front of her and turned on his heels to face her. He proceeded to take her hands in his and look into her eyes. His eyes now looked golden in the light. He ran his fingers slowly up her arms and placed them on her neck. He drew her toward him as he leaned in to plant a soft kiss on her lips. His lips warm and soft felt incredible on hers. He leaned away and placed his mouth by her ear and in his sultry voice whispered to her again.12
“I love you ” She wrapped her arms around him and pulled him to a hug as she whispered the three magical words back to him. She slowly pulled out of his grasp and looked into his eyes as their lips met again. 13
Author notes
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WTF!? Vampire story...JUST KIDDING! While you dont exactly write in my style, you do have a great voice. And your descriptions are amazing Sounds like you have a little experience too. Anyway...great write.
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FANTASTIC
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I enjoyed reading your piece. I think you have a good story. As I read it, these were my thoughts. 2nd paragraph You used the cliche "turned on a dime", I think it would read alright just to say she turned to face him. 8th paragraph "He turned gracefully on his heels" Your character is cool and handsome, gracefully doesn't quite fit. Perhaps something like" In a smooth motion he turned on his heels" and lastly it surprised me that she had premeditated the wooden stake. In reading the story I understood that he was a stranger and she wasn't expecting him. Maybe some indication that she had come there to kill him would explain it or some explination as to why she would have a wooden stake would help the story. Over all I think it is very interesting and it did keep me hooked to the end. Thanks for sharing.
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I would also like to say you have a talent for setting the scene. I've never been too good at describing the setting, I'm more the go getter into the plot just dive right in there type. Although I would love to have you talent. "the hallowed ground beneath her feet was soft and wet from last night’s rain"
excellent. Really.
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Oooo very nice, very nice indeed. I really liked this
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wow. I rather enjoyed it! I like the boy! The story kept my attention and I like how bold it was. I do not understand why after she drove the stake into his chest that she found herself still being lead by him, and that he was warm and live. Was his vampire nature a dream to her, or did she become a vampire and thus found him warm? Anyway, Great write!
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Awww that's really good. Thanks for entering.
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