Parent Tide

"Go to your room," Mom kindly said
This is why she was in bed
At 7:30 with the sun still up
Curled up with her small stuffed pup
Embracing for the wild ride
"Here it comes, just like a tide."1

It will start out calm, their feelings shared
Pretty soon they'll start to glare
White caps will form, the waves will grow high
Like Dad's temper when Mom assumes a lie
Feet stomp like thunder
Arms start to flair
Just like lightning in the air
The couple's curses create a boom
Vibrating the fist slams through the walls of the room
Daddy left and Mommy cried
It came and left
The Parent Tide

Author notes

MY PARENTS ARE PERFECTLY HAPPY AND THIS IS NOT IN MY VIEW!! THEY ALMOST NEVER FIGHT!
I wrote this because a lot of people are divorced or fighting and I wanted to say something in the veiw of the kid.

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  • Farhan gold member
    November 19
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    Very Nice!

    This was a very good poem indeed. I like it. Writing was original and theme was also nice. Rhythm and flow were also perfect. Keep Writing. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest. You're my first finalist by the way
    Happy Writing
    Farhan


  • Queen Mab gold member
    November 2

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    The Parent Tide... What a perfect ending. The poem is compelling. I loved the curled up mom in the beginning.
    Very well composed. I enjoyed it.

    ~Mab


  • easily amused
    November 2
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    This is very good.


  • SCREAMxTOxxBExHEARD
    September 14
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    Nice. I liked it...Good luck..


  • Shadow-Kissed
    June 26

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    Wow. This was very original. The title was remarkable along with your writing. Well done, I loved it.

    -Chantale
    P.S. Nice use of imagery.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

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