A few more weeks, then you can go home

beeping stuff1

nasty stuff2

swallow spit up3

nasty stuff4

no one can tell if it's good or bad5

take another test6

just stay in bed7

stupid people8

annoying people9

always talking10

always yaking11

won't shut up 12

night or day13

please let me rest14

and go away15

so tired sleepy16

want leave17

stuck to bed18

needles up my veins19

nasty smells20

and ugly scrubs21

want good food22

want to bathe in a tub23

dismal day24

abysmal ways25

just sleep some more to dull the pain

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i want my mommy

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  • First-Mate gold member
    June 20
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    A good poem. And I can actually relate to this--who likes hospitals?

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Rorshach gold member
    June 2

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    YEAH

    I can relate to this (even though I don't really want to).
    It really captures the whole feeling of vulnerability and helplessness that you experience during a prolonged period of hospitalisation.


  • TNTrouble
    June 1

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    I seriously ... I mean SERIOUSLY ... relate to this piece. Not that I am in the hospital but the whole feeling of being helpless and wanting to go home. I really love the line
    "just sleep some more to dull the pain" ...