I quickly finished everything from my dinner quickly because I didn't want my 'dad' to stand up. Last time he did I almost killed him, no lie. Pam had to get in the way, again. I got the plates that used to have salmon, salad, and cheesecake . I then jogged up from the kitchen to the stairs. My room was the last door in the hallway. Once inside I took out my sweats and dressed up properly. I decided on a dress, but one of my cute ones. It was different because not only did it show my cleavage but a thick line that connected my shoulders so they won't be exposed, but my boobs were still showing it was just in a triangle form. I kicked my left leg up and tied a cloth to it, where I kept my dagger in. In the world that I live in you never know what you'll need it. I did my hair quickly and I grabbed my necklace and wallet as I ran out of my room, pass the stairs, and my drive way.2
Quickly I made sure that my necklace was dangling from my neck. My parents were such stupid people. I mean seriously all they do is work, drink booze, get a hangover, go to work, then drink more booze when they get home. I was ashamed to call them my parents, much less tamers.3
What is a tamer? Selected people who can talk to, befriend, and fight with dragons. We are born with it. Usually you get your dragon when you are of age, ten or nine. I got mine at the age of three because my parent's dragons Sylpheene and Mercutio left my parents because they were sick and tired of there behavior and drinking of booze. Well aren't we all? They left me with a dragons egg and they said if I ever really needed there help I should call them out and they will come to assist me.4
I had the feeling that I was being followed. Sucks I know, but you still feel it. Without a warning something pulled on my hair. Looking behind me I saw no one, this was getting weird. It happened again and again, I had to know who it was and frankly the suspense was internally eating my liver. Then when I looked back I saw Pam my dragon.5
I loved my little Pam he was an ice dragon. Yes there are different types of dragons, from ice dragons to star dragons. Pam had his wings open and kept himself up by flapping them slowly and quietly, his tail which is split in two moved up and down with his movement, he also had his long neck coiled and I saw his sapphire in the center of his forehead. When I call him it glows and he knows that I'm calling. Calling your dragon can occur in a couple of ways. Calling your dragon when you need him/her to appear, fear calls him/her over because you need it's comfort, anger also is a calling. He was in small form now, 6
"Pam!" I screeched unhappily. "You scared the shit out of me." 7
"Aww Sevine it wasn't that bad." Pam said and I pouted.8
"You are wrong Pam it was bad. You had me thinking that something else was behind me." I said and he nodded.9
"I'm sorry Sevine." Pam said and I nodded.10
"It's all cool just go away I'm going to go in the store now." I said and he glowed and disappeared I walked into the liquor store.11
I was tall for my age and looked mature so they always mistook me to be twenty-one, I'm seventeen and I think that everyone had a load of stupidity in there system. Well Albert Einstein was right on the human's stupidity thing. 12
"Mack the usual." I answered and Mack the worker nodded and got everything for me. I noticed that his eyes were on my breasts well can't blame the stupid human they were exposed and out there. He handed me the booze and I gave him the money. 13
"So special person tonight?" Mack asked and I gave him a 'are you stupid' look.14
"No my parents' asked for this." I said and he nodded with an even bigger grin. "See ya'."15
Once I got out I sighed as I had to walk three and a half miles...again. As I was walking a man walked away from the trees and pinned me to the wall making me drop those stupid bottles of alcohol. I kicked whoever it was in the Eiffel Tower. When he was crouching down I then made my knee and his face meet each other. 16
He stood up and I felt something weird about it. As I stared at him I saw as he breathed fangs. So this dumb ass was a fangy, it was another name for vampire along by leech, and blood sucker.17
"Would you stop doing stupid shit and let me drink you blood?" he asked irritated and I played it cool.18
"Are you ok, you wanna be vampire." I said chuckling he looked at me irritated.19
"Don't play games with me you little idiot, you should be afraid." 20
"Sorry but I think you read 'Twilight' one too many times." I said and he snarled.21
Twilight was a complete joke and filled with bull shit. Vampires don't sparkle, they're only lazy during the day. 'Vegetarian Vampires' ha it's like your saying a strick vegetarian eats meat like crazy. It doesn't happen, they get horny and high when they are around human blood. The speed and strength is true, I'm glad for that much. The extra ability thing, it's also bull shit. Vampires only get abilities if they brink the blood of another night creature.22
If it's a mermaid they breath and swim fast underwater; an elf and they get their ears pointy and can order animals around; when they drink from werewolves they can morph into a wolf, they'll only have super long fangs; if it's a tamer or it's dragon they they get the power and the privilege to control a dragon; if it's a shape shifter well they shape shift.23
The red, black, and gold eye thing is not true, vampires just look blood shot when they haven't fed. The not wanting to drink human blood, there is an exception on that one: it'll only happen if they are after a particular scent of blood and want to get the person alone. They like during the night because of...dark alleyways people it's not rocket science.24
Werewolves were also fucked up in that book. Werewolves don't turn suddenly. It's born with them, heck they learn how to run before they learn how to walk. They stay in packs because they need to be close, if they are not they become claustrophobic obedient freaks. I have seen what a werewolf separated from it's pack becomes. They become cute puppies.25
They do turn into wolves and they are half a size bigger than the biggest horse. Yet they can also turn into their two legged forms. Yes they have not one but two forms. They stand on there two legs the difference is the height and the fore legs and there back legs as well become more like a human limb, if it's a guy they no longer have there Eiffel tower I don't know how nor do I want to know how it happens. Also the biggst shit about a werewolf is there temper. It's as if they're always on P.M.S. Not that good to befriend with. I just call them fur balls because that's what the are.26
The whole mind talking shit is fake. Why is that? It doesn't happen they speak. Sure it sounds like Chewy from star wars and the guy from terminator, but it was spoken not thought from one head to another.27
"That thing is a lie." He snarled.28
"At least we agree on something." I said and he tried to go at me again.29
I dodged almost coming in contact with the fangy's chompers, that was not going to be good. Suddenly a big ball of fur crashed into the fangy. They started to fight, it was mostly thrashing and hurdling one another to trees. I think that they forgot about my existence. How did they do it? I may as well ever know, must be the whole 'mortal rival' thing. The fur ball, the werewolf duh, was hurdled to the three that I was currently in. 30
The breath was knocked out of me as the fur ball met my body and my back became friends with the tree.I look down and the fur balls head was between my breasts definitely a guy. I got my dagger quickly and threw it at the fangy as he was charging at us. The fur ball stood up from what seems to be his comfortable position, he then did something completely unexpected as he licked the amount of breast that was exposed. I kicked him off of me and it seemed to be that he was smiling. My anger at that moment called Pam and he was beside me in a flash.31
"So you are a tamer." The fangy said and I looked at Pam. This was so not good. I looked at Pam with desperation.32
"Go Pam and if I don't call you by tomorrow go with Sylpheene and Mercutio." I ordered and he hesitated but did as he was told. The fangy charged at me. Dragons and their tamers were a rare delicacy for a vampire so I knew that this one wanted to sink his chompers into my neck badly.33
When he was inches away from my neck. I kicked his chest.34
"Stay still so I can Maul you!" the fangy said irritated. If you irritate a vampire and you are human he will most likely leave, I tried to do this but since I'm rare he's taking his chance.35
"You don't 'maul'." I said putting quotation marks over the word maul. "He does though." I said as the fur ball's teeth met the fangy's torso and ripped a chunk of him. I watched as the fur ball maul and destroyed the fangy. Then the bloody fur ball turned to me. When I was trying to escape I felt a bite on my neck.36
"Hi I'm Eric by the way." I heard a deep voice emit before I lost consciousness.
Author notes
Ok if I continue this the P.O.V. Thing will be like how I do things in Private Prince
(S) Sevine
(E) Eric
(P) Pam
*I had to rewrite this because I accidentaly placed abother story for a contest in it's place. =.= so sorry. I drew the wolf pic by the way
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Comments
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Haha nice Twilight rant, I like how you made a world completely your own, the vampires and tamers had very unique descriptions. I really like it, the ending really got me curious, theres so many questions!!! Whose Eric? Why'd he bite her? Will she be Ok? What was with the vamp trying to eat her??
Haha I guess I'll just have to read more. It's truly an amazing story,
Great job =]

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HAHA! You hate Twilight?!?!? FUCK YEAH! Another one! Well, it wasn't very well written.
Actually, it was written poorly. If you can say "shit" in the story, why can't you say crotch, or balls, instead of Eifel Tower? I'm a little confused.
It was extremely funny. I loved it more when it came close to ending.
-"You don't 'maul'." I said putting quotation marks over the word maul. "He does though." I said as the fur ball's teeth met the fangy's torso and ripped a chunk of him. I watched as the fur ball maul and destroyed the fangy. Then the bloody fur ball turned to me. When I was trying to escape I felt a bite on my neck.-
Good paragraph. "You don't 'maul'." I loved that part.

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You rock at writing fantasy ... I think its fantasy ... or is it horror? Well ... I guess its fantasy mixed with horror because vamps and werewolfs are horror but its fantasy since its not real and I'm just ocmpeltely confusing myself and confusing you! ANYWAY! I think you should continue this because it was very very very very good!
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i liked it. good choice on fantasy! i really liked the sarcasm. that was a good story! you should make a sequal in my next contest
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This is very interesting.
Does he live in the real world, or not? I can't tell yet?
Great description and character development.
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wow.......you definately must continue..........really good story........i love vampires............
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i love it! you should soooo continue it
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8D I love this! XD


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Wow, this was really good, normally i have a hard time getting into a story but when it is on a subject that i like it is so much easier and this was way easier. i didnt really notice the errors but i dont look for them i just read and comment
good job
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I like this! I love your MC!
Only one thing. The grammar thing I noticed. When somebody talks it's like this: "Hi, I'm Bob," Bob said. See the Comma before the last "? This is how you do it: "Hi, I"m Bob." Bob said.
That's about it. Other than that it was great!

beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 5.
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ohh me likey
I can't wait to read the next chapter! lol You write extremely good!


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wow!
That was really, really good. I say this because i have an obssesion with dragons. dragons are cool. Are you gonna continue this?? please do.
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Nice...
Great actually!I really like the whole vampire meets werewolf. And the dragon is a really good idea. Wow you are skilled. Very good -
Love the pic by the way
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Love it!!! Love it !!!! All your stories are great!!!! Must write more!!! Excellent description and great new ideas on dragons, tamer, werewolves and vampires!!! Keep up the good stories!!!!


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I like how it's going. Very descriptive too. I like your figure of speech, I also love the twilight part. Oh one thing,
'The fur ball, the werewolf duh, was hurdled to the three that I was currently in.'
Did you mean tree?
I'm looking forward to see what happens next

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ahh!


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Now to the dragon speak. Yes, you portrayed the species very well and I must say this is such an unusual combo for a story. I look forward to reading more.
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Lovely accompanying picture. I think you should. Like all of your stories, it shows a great deal of promise, it just requires tweaking grammatically is all.

















