This is our name in the moonlight

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Please - Comments longer than One sentence would be nice.
At least so you can reward yourself and give me constructive feed back.

Originally the prompt was :This is my name in the moonlight and I will use it again somewhere else. But for the time being I used it in this short,but emotional poem about the love I have for my partner and my yearning for him.

The wolf in me howls for him.

Love you baby <3

Blair

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  Caradoc
  June 3
  
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  Wow...I wish I could say something like this to my girlfriend. It's strange. I can write so well when I'm doing stories or poetry. But when I go to say the words they disappear.
  
  I hope this person reads this. It's good to know what you mean to people.
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  SatanicDreams
  June 1
  
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  Good

  I liked how you had short lines then long lines. But some of the words in the longer lines dont quite fit. Play around with the words some more. My creative writint teacher said "Be suspisious of words with more than two sylabols" i think if you chauge some of the words in the long lines of the first four paragraphs it could be great. I realy love the ending. The ending makes or breaks a poem in my opinion and you've done it well. Keep up the good work ^-^
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  rettalee
  May 31
  
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  Very Romantic

  It's nice to see a romantic poem on here once and awhile. Most of the time my random story reading just brings me to hateful, sad poems.. I liked this one very much. Thank You!
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  Pudding-zilla
  May 30
  
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  Wow. This is absolutely amazing. I think my favorite part of the poem is
  "I am rage
  I am Fury
  I am thunder and rain contrasting in the solemn sky" Beautiful.

  
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  MsAlee
  May 30
  
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  Completely beautiful Blair. i feel the exact same way for T (damn, i am really missing Him right now). These lines really hit home right now for me,
  "I am solace
  I am lonely
  I am awaiting the moment in your warm embrace"

  
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  BeckyVilRoolZeVorld
  May 30
  
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  Very nice! I really enjoyed reading this.
  I love how short and sweet it was. I'm sure whoever this is to loved it a lot. =]
  Keep it up! ^_^

  
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  HaydenLautner
  May 30
  
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  I really adore it. I love the contrasts in the first two stanzas. and how the first 3 lines are short, then the forth is long.
  There is also a greath rythm.
  This was really awesome, I loved it Blair
  
  Hayden