The sun was bursting with life, throwing beams of scalding heat down upon the marble buildings, glinting off of coloured glass and dancing merrily in the reflection of the various ponds and streams. Standing aloft of the other buildings sat a bell tower, placed precariously on the brink of a cliff, where no light shone. The bells were ringing, small chimes and gongs echoing out over that cliff edge, bringing sound to places where there was none.1
Small figures could be seen perched along the black ridges and crests on that cliff, staring down into the foreboding darkness that lay beneath them. Their wings stretched out, tense, ready to take flight if any sign of life stirred below their safe haven. The protectors; the guardians; the ones who were neither truly here nor there. The light sliced through them as if they weren’t there and the faded remnants of once beautiful dresses stirring only feebly in the brisk torrents of wind that made it across to them. 2
And the cats. Black, brown, tabby, every colour you could think of. They roamed the vast expanse of buildings and rooftops, colours standing out clearly amongst the white marble and dusty glass. The souls of the living. How many lives did each cat still hold? Nine? Seven? Three? Once a cat died, it would be soon enough replaced with an angel, thrown from existence forever. When a cat was born, there was a new birth into the living world. Such things of value should have been held with great respect and glory, but the city’s angels passed by them as if they weren’t even there. 3
It was a particular cat that drew the least attention. The white one. Sure, there were other white cats, but none that shone this brightly, glinted as if made of the marble surrounding her. She was stalking across the rooftops at that moment, tail lashing, and blue eyes surveying the angels as they went from to and fro. She knew their kind, and didn’t show any of them any compassion, or pity, or any other emotion. They were just here. 4
Bunching up her slender legs, she leapt down onto the cobbles that lined the streets. She sniffed the ground. It smelt of flowers from the flowerbeds, clean clothes from the robes and dresses around her, cats and...5
She sniffed again.6
Demon.7
She hissed quietly, glancing up at all the angels passing her unawares. Stupid beings, held aloft in your own peculiar ways, can’t you smell it? It’s right here. Several moments passed until she gave up, determined to track the scent herself. The other cats wouldn’t, they were cowards in her eyes. There was a demon in the city, and she was going to find it before the angels did. 8
The cat bounced down the street, causing angels to trip, stumble and hover to get out of her way. Sure, they notice me now. Just so they don’t get their robes dirty. Can’t see me enough at other times. You there, get out of my way.9
She skidded round a corner and came to an abrupt halt, fur standing on end. Ahead of her stood a very pristine building made purely of coloured glass. So many colours unnameable, all fragmented and fixed together to create a dazzling maze of reflected light upon the surrounding buildings. It was the temple, the headquarters. Inside there, somewhere, rested the almighty being known as Grace, ruler of all the angels and everything beyond it. It was a place where the cats never went. No one knew why, nor did they care for the most part. 10
She laid herself down in a nearby flowerbed and stared at the temple, eyes the clearest blue that they’d ever been. There was a demon in that building, and only she knew. 11
Author notes
Yawn.
I finally wrote something.
Bow to me.
*Picture not by me.
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woot a story about cats' i love cat's,hope to read more by you your a good writer
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Pretty interesting idea I suppose. I rather liked the wording. This is extremely well written. I give you props for making it flow well.
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Incredebly interesting! I love the whole cat idea! Kitties are just so kewl :3 Great idea and amazing writing! Can't wait to read the rest!
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I LOVE this! What an interesting concept; you really must continue this story. I love the descriptions and the details in general - you really know how to leave a reader begging for more.
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Very very nice continue the story please.
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I loved the description on this! Really, I didn't know cats had blue eyes like that, hahaha. But really nice thoughts, they tie in beautifully.
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Oh... never mind about my other comment, it didn't let me add more applause. But what I liked so much about it was the flow, description, the way you make that one cat different from the others... wish I could give more than 3 applause
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Some more applause: (since I liked it so much)
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That was really good - I'm - uh - oh dear... SPEECHLESS.
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I like this. Usually I am not into the cat stuff (might explain why I never read Warriors) but this was good. You described things very well and I liked how the one white cat is so different from everyone and it makes her better in a sense.
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The sun is setting in the sky <3 Rather interesting if I do say so myself. I do believe I have not read a story like this in such a fashion that an animal takes on a humanistic characteristic. I am getting it right though in my head.
Well You did tell me about the plot and I was rather eager to read on to see what was fascinating about this story that you loved and I can see why - It is totally out of your norm relam of writing.
Keep working on it.
I shall continue reading and commenting.
Well done -pats-
mrowww
*steals your cat to make asian cuisine
Blair <3
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Beyond über-descriptive! This was just....bursting with life and things like that.
I wanna read more!
--Aden
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Love this plot soooo much! Don't know why, but your feline protagonist reminds me of that white cat from Sailor Moon. The beginning was very poetic and beautifully written with artistic, dazzling flair bursting with colourful imagery.
Brilliant work. I'm glad to see that you're writing again...
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Psh, Dannles. How come you ALWAYS say you're a terrible writer? Because--*Glances at the ad next to this.* ...Dude...It's a fucking cat...Is that creepy or WHAT?!
Anyways...You're an amazing writer. I loved how descriptive you were and how you made it so I, the reader, could actually picture in my mind the building, the cats and everything.
I think I liked the beginning the most. You set the whole scene. It was perfect how you put in the whole bells chiming thing. That just set it off for me.
I really enjoyed reading this, Dannles!
Love always,
Beckus.
(PS...See how I didn't put 'Becky'?
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Wow!
I loved the voice you used for this. I was hooked from the beginning, right to the end where I had to pout a bit from wanting more. I thought the piece flowed real well. I'm very interesting in reading more. Thank you for posting it!!!
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, characters: 5.
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Great beginning!!!!! This is a story that I would like to read on!! Keep on writing
-songbird
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I love that white cat
Any story from a cat's POV is a winner for me.
Great descriptions as well.
Keep going and Rorshach will keep reading.
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hmm
seems pretty good so far =]
beginning: 5, language: 3, dialog: 3, characters: 4.
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Very very nice and nice read
My first time reading about cats and except role playing warriors and thanks it was nice to sit there and read instead of coming up with my own story , thanks and keep writing and you will add to this right? -
Nice job
Cool idea, i wish my writting was that descriptive and interesting. I haven't read a stroy on cats yet so it was different but good different. Keep writting :-)
beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 5.
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I must say this sounds wonderfully promising! I can't wait to read more.
I found that this was almost perfect on the way of wording. In your last sentence, second paragraph "of one beautiful dresses stirring." I'm confused by the wording of this combination... It sounds almost as if you are trying to say there are several dresses or just one or a bunch of people's dresses? That threw me off a bit...
Otherwise I found really nothing to pick about. I really liked your descriptions, reminded me that I need to work on my settings a bit more to make things more precise. You've got a lot of talent. You better keep posting.
Four things in order:
1. *bows*
And the rest are claps...
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Yeah, the wording was a bit off there. I actually meant to write 'once' instead of 'one' xD
I'll change it now.
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Ah much better!
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I love your descriptions. Kitties, holding in their lives, the souls of angels? A fascinating prospect. The story so far is gripping. I look forward to where you decide to take it.
~Mab
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Bows.
Good job. Interesting. I'll be very interested to see where this goes. So happy you finally decided to write something
Good luck with the story,
Kevan.
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Yayyyy, a comment just like you promised if I posted something!
Thankyouuu.
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Lmao, I was like "What Kitty?" and then I clicked the link.
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^^
Isn't she prettyyy
Sorry, I'm having cat-love issues due to expecting a new litter soon @.@
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