he sits and waits in the back were he can hear them all talking about him1
"he'll never make it."2
he sits and watches them talk about him.3
"hero yeah right he'll be doom tonight."4
tears roll down his face in regret that he's trying to save these people.5
he get up and leaves. he walks for days tell he comes to a cliff he waits and watches.6
"i see you are here already." he says7
"i see your as sharp as ever." says the young man standing behind zero.8
"it's nice to see you again reign." says zero takes the man in embrace.9
"you to brother."10
then they turn and see it the giant best that feeds on holy beings11
"ready zero?"12
"ready as ever."13
they run. flames shot from its mouth they dogged it. reign runs slashing a gets knocked away. for three days they fought the beast.14
"zero give me your sword its holy i can kill it with it."15
zero through the sword to he's brother "good luck."16
reign runs right in to the jaws of the beast. reign slashes the insides of the beast tell he hit the spot of its immortality but it was to late for him to get back out the last thing he could do was through he's sword out to zero hoping that he could win.17
tears falling from zeros face he knew that it was the end for his brother but he knew that his brother was happy to be able to die for lived longer then any man should zero knew what it was like for he also lived longer then any man should have to. zero took up reigns sword zero felt it change in he's grip the blade was turned holy in his grip for he was holy him self. he ran at the beast he dogged the claws of the beast and slashed right through the neck of the beast and killed it. 18
"there i have done it." he said looking up at the sky.19
" what else do you want me to do let me go so i can die like any other man." and those were the last words he ever spoke for he die then and there the gods taking he's life for that was zeros last wish, but yet they hadn't taken his life for but they turn him in to the god of light.20
Author notes
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Comments
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nice
Wow I liked this story, it was really good. Really like the idea of the hero feeling sorry for saving people.beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 5, overall: 7/10 - Excellent - 10 left, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 5.
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oooh i like this! keep it up.
Kitty xxx


