Shawn:1
Nova was in love with someone else? A rush of emotions flooded me. The noblest, I felt sorry for Brett. The cruelest, joyful that it wasn’t Brett. The most prominent, absolute and complete heartbreak that she was in love with someone at all. 2
But all I could think of doing in that moment was finding out who it was. I knew I couldn’t bear not knowing. I had to ask her.3
“Nova can I talk to you for a minute?” I said over the music.4
“Sure.” She said, following me outside.5
“Don’t get mad at Abby...”6
She laughed, “Do I ever?”7
I smiled at her, “true...but this time, you might.”8
“What is it?” She asked.9
I took a deep breath. “She told me that you were in love.”10
“Oh.” She said, panic plain on her face. She shut her eyes, closed. Tight. “Did, she um, say...who?”11
“No.”12
She looked so relieved I almost laughed. “You’re not going to tell me, are you?”13
She laughed, “no. I am going to have to murder Abby for telling you that much already.”14
The confirmation sunk it. And it stung. I tried to play it light, I but I needed to find out who it was. “Not even if I promise to be stealth when I stalk him to find out whether he’s good enough for you?”15
She laughed. “He’s too good for me. That’s the point. And still no.”16
“There is no guy in the world who could ever be too good for you, Nova.” I told her, honestly.17
She rolled her eyes, “I’m still not telling you.”18
I gave her my puppy-dog face. But I knew there was no use. She wasn’t budging on this one.19
Nova:20
Watching Shawn’s puppy dogface that always used to make me laugh, I was suddenly sad. Because I guess part of me wished that Shawn wasn’t joking around right now. Instead, I secretly had hoped when he had found out about my love for another guy (well, he thinks it’s another guy) he would have felt…something. Jealously? Sadness? Protectiveness? I didn’t know. But now that I see all he feels is curiosity, I felt depressed. I think it must have started to show through my happy pretense because Shawn suddenly took my hands and asked me what was wrong.21
“Nothing, nothing.” I said, “Just a little tired.”22
But Shawn didn’t look convinced.23
A lone tear escaped and rolled down my cheek. I wiped it away with the back of my hand, hoping I’d done it fast enough that Shawn wouldn’t notice.24
“Are you crying?” Shawn sounded horrified. I shook my head, but more tears formed in my eyes, spilling over, betraying me.25
“Oh, Nova.” Shawn wrapped his arms around me and cradled me close to him. I cried on his shoulder for a bit. I don’t know what came over me. Maybe I really was tired.26
“Please don’t cry.” Shawn pleaded.27
It took a lot of will power to get a hold of myself and stop the tears, but I was able to do it.28
“What’s wrong?” Shawn whispered to me.29
“Just…” I sighed, “The unrequited love thing is kind of getting to me.” I was only half lying.30
“I don’t see what guy wouldn’t be in love with you.” He said, trying to cheer me up, but it wasn’t working because he didn’t see the irony in what he was saying. I laughed without humor.31
Shawn:32
I was glad Nova didn’t seem to notice that I hadn’t let go of her. She was still in my arms. It was so nice being close to her.33
“How do you know he’s not interested?” I asked, softly.34
“It’s just obvious.” She said, not meeting my gaze.35
“You’re killing me, you know.” I said, turning the truth into a joke.36
“Huh?” she mumbled.37
“By not telling me who it is.”38
“Believe me, you don’t want to know.”39
She was right of course. It would just hurt more when I found out who it was. But curiosity always wins. “Please tell me. I promise I won’t laugh, if that’s what you’re worried about.”40
“Yes you will.”41
“I give you my word. I will not laugh.”42
She looked as if she were in physical pain. I took a sharp intake of breath at the sight. “Please don’t ask me again, Shawn. I can’t tell you.”43
And with that she walked back inside, leaving me out in the cold by myself.44
Author notes
This is the fifth part of a piece I wrote a long time ago. I stopped here originally (being my ADD self, jumping to another story) but I have decided to finish it now.
First part:
http://storywrite.com/story/288918
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OH>>> you are so talented!!! I'm going to the next part!!! I'm love with this story!! Thanks for sharing it!
...*sniff* *
I guess there is no other part .... please continue it... I need to know what's going to happen.....
This seems to be one of those "twilight" book that you can't stop reading.... great story...( sorry for the comparisson)..
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great work!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
can't wait for the next chapter. please make it soon!!!!!!!1 -
Good use of switching POV's and dialogue.
One small typo I found
P19: I have her my puppy-dog face
should be
I gave her my puppy-dog face
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Good use of conversations which make the story feel smooth and real.
I like the descriptions used for the characters and the plot itself is full of suspense.
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Gahhh!!! It's addicting!!!Your story that is
beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 3, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Gah! Okay, you gotta post the next part... like... soon! It's so cute!!! ^^
I like how all the posts are super short, but at the same time, i want to keep reading so hope they are longer. lol.
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Thanks so much for reading and commenting! I'm really glad you like my story. I'll post the next part soon.
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Whoa
I love this story and i keep wanting to read more. Pleeeeeeease keep writting, i want to know what happens next. :-)
beginning: 4, language: 3, plot: 5, ending: 4, dialog: 3, characters: 5.
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this story is amazing... please post more!!
i agree with everyone else- shawn and nova have to tell each other their feelings! now!
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Thanks Kiki!
I'm almost done with the next part now. This one will be a bit different, as I wrote all of the parts up to this point about a year ago. Same story line, just my writing style is a little different.
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ur gonna kill me woman.
come on u have to get her to tell him. too much suspence!! but i like it and hate it. i love this chapter. lol i loves u sisbeginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Hahaha!
I'm glad readers are feeling suspense! That's a good sign (to me, at least.)
Thanks
and ily2. haha.
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Oh the suspense
Nova has to tell Shawn!
Though I can totally relate to how she is feeling. In love with your best guy friend but feel also that you are completely unworthy of him at the same time...yeah. -_-
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Haha aww.
Well I hope you tell you're best guy friend! Don't be Nova! You ARE worthy.
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Gah! How can each of them not tell that the other likes them? (Then again it hits close to home with me and my boyfriend flirting and stuff about a year before we even actually started going out and neither of us knew that the other one liked them. -.- *sigh* lol)
And I know about the ADD thing... I have yet to complete a multiple-part story/novel/whatever. Hopefully, I will lol.
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Haha aww that's cute! :]
Yeah, it's a little ridiculous that none of them know.
But it makes it a lot more fun to write.
And I've only completed one before. And it was my fifth try. So I think it just takes time and practice. xD
Thanks so much for reading and commenting! It means a lot.
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