Among the Fallen - Chapter 1

As a baby, the priests and pastors of the church had been able to care for Lilith as if she were any normal child. They had fed her when she cried and put her to sleep when she was cranky and put whiskey on her gums when she was teething.1

But when she was about thirty-five years old (though she still appeared to be four) she became constantly ill. She could barely keep any food down, and only water did not upset her. Her health deteriorated so much that the church members thought she would die.2

Lilith lived five years through this sickness with no help. But then a strange friar came to the town, and he had a cure in the form of a foreign drink. It was the most delicious drink she had ever tasted, and over a week's span of time, her health returned.3

"What is this?" she asked the friar once she was strong again.4

"It is the juice from the fruit of the Tree."5

"What tree?"6

"THE Tree. The Tree of Knowledge of Good and Evil. You are part angel, my dear, and therefore need part of the tree to stay strong and healthy."7

"Have you met others like me?" she asked, growing excited.8

"Yes. Would you like to come home with me? I care for many children of your kind," he asked with a smile.9

"Really? You'd take me with you?"10

"Of course. Now, what is your name?" The girl blushed, knowing very well that in some religions, her name was damned. "You can tell me. I don't care what it is." 11

"Lilith," she said at last.12

"Ah. The first woman for Adam, even before Eve. According to many, it was a 'mistake' for her to be put with Adam and that she was a 'demon.'"13

"You believe that she wasn't a mistake or a demon?"14

"Are you?"15

"...No."

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  • Forgotten Anomaly
    July 27

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    This seems like ti could be the beginning of a very interesting story, its a little vague and rushed though and I'm confused as too her age but you really could take this somewhere with a little work. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.


  • TheFemmeFatale
    July 12

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    YES. I love this! It's so DIFFERENT from anything out there, not your typical vamp or were story (though I love those hehe).

    I love the descriptions! And you know I love this story. Which is why I kept bugging you for more. :]

  • love2write
    June 14
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    Where are you going with this? Looks like a start to something good.


  • Marisalyn13
    June 14

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    this turned out to be pretty well. at first i thought it was going to be a religoous story, but know. if theres more to it, i have a feeling it will be like some fantasy adventure action twist. keep up the good work!!!

  • graybeard
    June 14

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    Hey Blood Wolf,
    Seems like this is the start of something that could be pretty good. Is there going to be more, or is this it?


  • Orimis gold member
    May 26

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    Yay!

    This reminds me of my story. Which i need to update. I know. Soon, I promise.

    Anyway, this is awesome. I hope you continue this. I just adore the concept in itself. Love you.

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